54. Homework
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강사 첨삭
Thank you very much for doing your homework, Jason^^
I think family can mean a lot of things.
Most importantly, love is the thing that binds the members.
See you later!
Q. How do you define family? Should they always be related by blood?
>>CORRECT!
I figure that is really difficult question for me since I have never thought about it before.
>>I figure that it is really a difficult question for me since I have never thought about it before.
There is an adage old saying that Blood is thicker than Water in Korea.
>>There is an old saying that blood is thicker than water in Korea.
And they highlighted that family was related by blood.
>>CORRECT!
But I guess that they had never adopted a child even once.
>>CORRECT!
That’s because they always thought the family was made by blood.
>>CORRECT!
However, there are various type of families in the world nowadays.
>>However, there are various types of families in the world nowadays.
First, it made by blood like our ancestors
>>First, it is made by blood like our ancestors.
Second, it made by an adoption from parents who have enough money to take care of babies and didn’t have baby with different reasons.
>>Second, it is made by an adoption from parents who have enough money to take care of babies and didn’t have a baby due to different reasons.
Thus, they don’t have any same blood.
>> Thus, they don’t have the same blood.
Hence, they thought their children had been born and bred in their mind.
>>Hence, they thought their children had been born and raised in their mind.
Third, it made by an organization because parents abandon their baby on the road or in front of house called orphanage.
>>Third, it is made by an organization because parents abandon their baby on the road or in front of house called orphanage.
That’s because most of this kind of parents are not adults. So, they are afraid to bear of their babies.
>>That’s because most of these kind of parents are not adults, so, they are afraid to bear babies.
And it’s the worst parent for their children.
>>It is the worst parent for their children.
Anyways, I don’t have more ideas but I can say that there are various types of family in the world.
>>Anyways, I don’t have ideas anymore, but I can say that there are various types of families in the world.
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