55. Homework
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Thank you very much, Jason^^
I truly appreciate each person\'s different opinions because we can view everything in multiple facets.
See you later!
Q. Why is diversity in a workplace important?
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First, they might be able to gather creative ideas since each person has an individual opinion.
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So, I think we called it brainstorming.
>> So, I think we call it brainstorming.
Second, if someone makes mistakes, it might be caught by others.
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I have an experience about this question when I worked in Malaysia for project.
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While me and others, who were engaged in that project that worked for maintenance, consultant, construction managers and lenders, were having a site checking to find deficiencies, each person found different points.
>>While I and others, who were engaged in that project that worked for maintenance, such as consultants, construction managers and lenders, were having a site check to find deficiencies, each person found different points.
that\'s because we concentrated on checking based on each know-how.
>>That\'s because we concentrated on checking based on each person\'s know-how.
Hence, I received more than four hundred punch lists to fix since they had found diverse parts.
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If I only had checked with construction people, I would have less than hundred deficiency lists gotten since they would not be able to find things which would be an important during maintenance period times.
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Anyways, equipment of facilities were improved a lot although I got hard time removing in punch lists.
>> Anyways, the equipment of facilities was improved a lot although I got a hard time removing those in punch lists.
Therefore, I have a positive view about diversity in a workplace.
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