55. Homework

2018-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. Why is diversity in a workplace important? First, they might be able to gather creative ideas since each person has an individual opinion. So, I think we called it brainstorming. Second, if someone makes mistakes, it might be caught by others. I have an experience about this question when I worked in Malaysia for project. While me and others, who were engaged in that project that worked for maintenance, consultant, construction managers and lenders, were having a site checking to find deficiencies, each person found different points. that's because we concentrated on checking based on each know-how. Hence, I received more than four hundred punch lists to fix since they had found diverse parts. If I only had checked with construction people, I would have less than hundred deficiency lists gotten since they would not be able to find things which would be an important during maintenance period times. Anyways, equipment of facilities were improved a lot although I got hard time removing in punch lists. Therefore, I have a positive view about diversity in a workplace.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much, Jason^^

I truly appreciate each person\'s different opinions because we can view everything in multiple facets.

See you later!

Q. Why is diversity in a workplace important?
>>CORRECT!
First, they might be able to gather creative ideas since each person has an individual opinion.

>>CORRECT!

 So, I think we called it brainstorming.
>>
 So, I think we call it brainstorming.
Second, if someone makes mistakes, it might be caught by others.
>>CORRECT!
I have an experience about this question when I worked in Malaysia for project.

>>CORRECT!

While me and others, who were engaged in that project that worked for maintenance, consultant, construction managers and lenders, were having a site checking to find deficiencies, each person found different points.

>>While I and others, who were engaged in that project that worked for maintenance, such as consultants, construction managers and lenders, were having a site check to find deficiencies, each person found different points.

that\'s because we concentrated on checking based on each know-how.

>>That\'s because we concentrated on checking based on each person\'s know-how.

 Hence, I received more than four hundred punch lists to fix since they had found diverse parts.

>>CORRECT!

If I only had checked with construction people, I would have less than hundred deficiency lists gotten since they would not be able to find things which would be an important during maintenance period times.

>>CORRECT!

 Anyways, equipment of facilities were improved a lot although I got hard time removing in punch lists.
>>
 Anyways, the equipment of facilities was improved a lot although I got a hard time removing those in punch lists.
Therefore, I have a positive view about diversity in a workplace.

>>CORRECT!

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