57. Homework

2018-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. What makes your day nice? I am just going to add things what makes me day nice in my routine life I get up almost 6 am with a morning alarm. If I don’t get up on time, sequentially, next schedule would be ruined. So, it makes me happy when I get up at exact 6 am I go to toilet to wash my face, shampoo, and shower. While I take a shower using warm water, I am happy since I like it. If the temperature of rain is warm, I am going to take a shower in the rain. Sometimes, when I get stress, I stand under dropping warm water and think about what makes me stress. Furthermore, I organize my feeling until I feel relaxed Anyway, after that, I drive to the site which I have been working in Incheon. While I drive, I drink coffee that I made with warm milk, americano which I bought in the market, and maple syrup that I bought thought the online shopping myself at home and it makes my feeling better since it’s delicious. If I don’t meet traffic jam on the way to go to the site, I am happy with that since it makes my drive harder. Moreover, I am going to be able to have breakfast for free after I arrived at the office on time since the company that I work pays it. What if I arrive late, I can’t have breakfast and it makes me harder since I can’t stand with the feeling starving. And after I finish working on time or earlier, it makes me happy since I will be able to get free time more. When I arrive home, I have deserts a little such as bananas, oranges, or snacks since I have to go swimming at 9:00pm. After finishing swimming at 10:00pm, I take some eggs with milks instead of having dinner. And I do homework every single night. If I am done to do it fast, I have a time to watch American dramas called friends or watch Korean movies. Those kind of small things make my feeling nice. 

강사 첨삭

Oh, me too, Jason!

Going home and finishing my tasks early make me happy^^

Moreover, teaching my students and seeing them learn make my heart grateful^^

See you, and have a nice day!

Q. What makes your day nice?
>>CORRECT!
I am just going to add things what makes me day nice in my routine life
>>
I am just going to add things that make my day nice in my routine life.
I get up almost 6 am with a morning alarm.

>>CORRECT!

If I don’t get up on time, sequentially, next schedule would be ruined.

>>If I don’t get up on time, sequentially, the next schedule would be ruined.

So, it makes me happy when I get up at exact 6 am
>>
So, it makes me happy when I get up at exactly 6 am.
I go to toilet to wash my face, shampoo, and shower.

>>I go to toilet to wash my face, shampoo my hair, and shower.

While I take a shower using warm water, I am happy since I like it.

>>CORRECT!

If the temperature of rain is warm, I am going to take a shower in the rain.

>>If the temperature of the rain is warm, I am going to take a shower in the rain.

 Sometimes, when I get stress, I stand under dropping warm water and think about what makes me stress.

>> Sometimes, when I get stressed, I stand under warm water and think about what makes me stressed.

Furthermore, I organize my feeling until I feel relaxed
>>Furthermore, I organize my feeling until I feel relaxed.
Anyway, after that, I drive to the site which I have been working in Incheon.

>>Anyway, after that, I drive to the site where I have been working.

While I drive, I drink coffee that I made with warm milk, americano which I bought in the market, and maple syrup that I bought thought the online shopping myself at home and it makes my feeling better since it’s delicious.

>>While I drive, I drink coffee that I made with warm milk, americano which I bought in the market, and maple syrup that I bought through online shopping myself at home and it makes my feeling better since it’s delicious.
If I don’t meet traffic jam on the way to go to the site, I am happy with that since it makes my drive harder.

>>CORRECT!
Moreover, I am going to be able to have breakfast for free after I arrived at the office on time since the company that I work pays it.

>>Moreover, I am going to be able to have breakfast for free after I arrived at the office on time since the company that I work at pays for it.

What if I arrive late, I can’t have breakfast and it makes me harder since I can’t stand with the feeling starving.
>>I
f I arrive late, I can’t have breakfast and it is harder for me since I can’t stand the feeling of starvation.
And after I finish working on time or earlier, it makes me happy since I will be able to get free time more.
>>
And after I finish working on time or earlier, it makes me happy since I will be able to get more free time.
When I arrive home, I have deserts a little such as bananas, oranges, or snacks since I have to go swimming at 9:00pm.
>>
When I arrive home, I have deserts a little such as bananas, oranges, or snacks since I have to go swimming at 9:00pm.
After finishing swimming at 10:00pm, I take some eggs with milks instead of having dinner.

>>After swimming at 10:00pm, I take some eggs with milks instead of having dinner.

 And I do homework every single night.

>>CORRECT!

If I am done to do it fast, I have a time to watch American dramas called friends or watch Korean movies.
>>
If I am done doing it fast, I have time to watch American dramas called \"Friends\", or watch Korean movies.
Those kind of small things make my feeling nice. 

>>Those kinds of small things make my feeling nice.

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