59. Homework
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Q. Describe an event that changed your life forever.
First event;
When I was high school, I met my ex-girlfriend. I loved her a lot. That’s why I have changed many kinds of my bad behaviors for her. Hence, most of the times, I didn’t be using slang words to the other people until now since I didn’t want to see her look sad and angry. Furthermore, I have learned what is a good manner to the woman, how to express my feeling to the others, and how to make their partner feeling happy.
Second event;
When I was in university, I helped cheating for my friend who had asked me a favor the exam during last test at second grade. According to situation, someone who had gotten lower score owing to the relative evaluation accused me and my friend to the professor. And I got half score of the perfect score. Following that, I lost a chance to be a scholarship student of the first and be a second. At the first time, I blamed in my mind my friend who had asked me kindness and someone who had denounced me to the professor. Actually, I had enough confidence to get a scholarship, and I thought even if he got a same score with me in this subject, it would not affect for me. However, it made me get an unsuccessful and I figured that wasn’t their fault and it was my mistakes since I allowed to help him. Thus, this experience gave me a lesson. If I am engaged any situations and it brings bad result, it means it is also my fault since I allowed to the others to do something and didn’t do anything during progress.
Third event;
When I worked in Malaysia, parents of my friends were gone more than two times and I couldn't do anything without sending money to my friends. Thus, nowadays, I try to send my time with my family and friend such as trip to some good places, have some nice meals, and share a life story in the café. A passing time can’t be returned and I figure that spending every time with my family and friends have to make precious
강사 첨삭
Wow, this is a handful of lessons learned^^
I have also experienced a lot of decisions, but I choose not to dwell on these anymore.
See you Jason^^
Q. Describe an event that changed your life forever.
>>CORRECT!
First event;
>>First event:
When I was high school, I met my ex-girlfriend. I loved her a lot.
>>When I was a high school student, I met my ex-girlfriend, and I loved her a lot.
That’s why I have changed many kinds of my bad behaviors for her.
>>CORRECT!
Hence, most of the times, I didn’t be using slang words to the other people until now since I didn’t want to see her look sad and angry.
>>Hence, most of the times, I didn’t use slang words to other people anymore, since I didn’t want to see her look sad and angry.
Furthermore, I have learned what is a good manner to the woman, how to express my feeling to the others, and how to make their partner feeling happy.
>>Furthermore, I have learned good manners towards a woman, how to express my feeling to others, and how to make their partner happy.
Second event;
>>Second event:
When I was in university, I helped cheating for my friend who had asked me a favor the exam during last test at second grade.
>>When I was at university, my friend had asked me a favor exam during the last test at second year, and I helped him cheat.
According to situation, someone who had gotten lower score owing to the relative evaluation accused me and my friend to the professor.
>>According to the situation, someone who had gotten a lower score owing to the relative evaluation accused me and my friend.
And I got half score of the perfect score.
>>And I got a half score of the perfect score.
Following that, I lost a chance to be a scholarship student of the first and be a second.
>>Following that, I lost a chance to be a scholar student who ranked first and became the second.
At the first time, I blamed in my mind my friend who had asked me kindness and someone who had denounced me to the professor.
>> At the first time, I mentally blamed my friend who had asked me kindness and someone who had denounced me to the professor.
Actually, I had enough confidence to get a scholarship, and I thought even if he got a same score with me in this subject, it would not affect for me.
>>Actually, I had enough confidence to get the scholarship, and I thought even if he got a same score with me in this subject, it would not affect for me.
However, it made me get an unsuccessful and I figured that wasn’t their fault and it was my mistakes since I allowed to help him.
>> However, it made me unsuccessful and I figured that it wasn’t their fault and it was my mistake since I allowed to help him.
Thus, this experience gave me a lesson.
>>CORRECT!
If I am engaged any situations and it brings bad result, it means it is also my fault since I allowed to the others to do something and didn’t do anything during progress.
>>If I am engaged in any situations and it brings bad results, it means it is also my fault since I allowed others to do something and didn’t do anything during progress.
Third event;
>>Third event:
When I worked in Malaysia, parents of my friends were gone more than two times and I couldn\'t do anything without sending money to my friends.
>>When I worked in Malaysia, the parents of my friends were gone more than two times and I couldn\'t do anything without sending money to my friends.
Thus, nowadays, I try to send my time with my family and friend such as trip to some good places, have some nice meals, and share a life story in the café.
>>Thus, nowadays, I try to spend my time with my family and friend such as traveling to some good places, having some nice meals, and share a life story in the coffee shop.
A passing time can’t be returned and I figure that spending every time with my family and friends have to make precious
>>A passing time can’t be returned and I figure that spending every time with my family and friends make precious memories.
I have also experienced a lot of decisions, but I choose not to dwell on these anymore.
See you Jason^^
Q. Describe an event that changed your life forever.
>>CORRECT!
First event;
>>First event:
When I was high school, I met my ex-girlfriend. I loved her a lot.
>>When I was a high school student, I met my ex-girlfriend, and I loved her a lot.
That’s why I have changed many kinds of my bad behaviors for her.
>>CORRECT!
Hence, most of the times, I didn’t be using slang words to the other people until now since I didn’t want to see her look sad and angry.
>>Hence, most of the times, I didn’t use slang words to other people anymore, since I didn’t want to see her look sad and angry.
Furthermore, I have learned what is a good manner to the woman, how to express my feeling to the others, and how to make their partner feeling happy.
>>Furthermore, I have learned good manners towards a woman, how to express my feeling to others, and how to make their partner happy.
Second event;
>>Second event:
When I was in university, I helped cheating for my friend who had asked me a favor the exam during last test at second grade.
>>When I was at university, my friend had asked me a favor exam during the last test at second year, and I helped him cheat.
According to situation, someone who had gotten lower score owing to the relative evaluation accused me and my friend to the professor.
>>According to the situation, someone who had gotten a lower score owing to the relative evaluation accused me and my friend.
And I got half score of the perfect score.
>>And I got a half score of the perfect score.
Following that, I lost a chance to be a scholarship student of the first and be a second.
>>Following that, I lost a chance to be a scholar student who ranked first and became the second.
At the first time, I blamed in my mind my friend who had asked me kindness and someone who had denounced me to the professor.
>> At the first time, I mentally blamed my friend who had asked me kindness and someone who had denounced me to the professor.
Actually, I had enough confidence to get a scholarship, and I thought even if he got a same score with me in this subject, it would not affect for me.
>>Actually, I had enough confidence to get the scholarship, and I thought even if he got a same score with me in this subject, it would not affect for me.
However, it made me get an unsuccessful and I figured that wasn’t their fault and it was my mistakes since I allowed to help him.
>> However, it made me unsuccessful and I figured that it wasn’t their fault and it was my mistake since I allowed to help him.
Thus, this experience gave me a lesson.
>>CORRECT!
If I am engaged any situations and it brings bad result, it means it is also my fault since I allowed to the others to do something and didn’t do anything during progress.
>>If I am engaged in any situations and it brings bad results, it means it is also my fault since I allowed others to do something and didn’t do anything during progress.
Third event;
>>Third event:
When I worked in Malaysia, parents of my friends were gone more than two times and I couldn\'t do anything without sending money to my friends.
>>When I worked in Malaysia, the parents of my friends were gone more than two times and I couldn\'t do anything without sending money to my friends.
Thus, nowadays, I try to send my time with my family and friend such as trip to some good places, have some nice meals, and share a life story in the café.
>>Thus, nowadays, I try to spend my time with my family and friend such as traveling to some good places, having some nice meals, and share a life story in the coffee shop.
A passing time can’t be returned and I figure that spending every time with my family and friends have to make precious
>>A passing time can’t be returned and I figure that spending every time with my family and friends make precious memories.
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