6-11th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
The sexual harassment is a big issue in Korea, too.
The harassment becomes prevalent every area even in the bureaucracy.
The Hollywood's actresses have recently announced the experience that they got some assaults by the power.
It's so called by 'me-too'.
Many celebrity who we already know is included in the list of the sexual harassment.
Until now, anybody who was pointed as an assaulter doesn't apologize for it.
The persons who have the power want to use it even it is wrong.
They think that nobody knows their behaviors.
There is no secret in the world.
It would not discover right now and the victims get a lot of pain from it.
However, the truth finally discover and everybody knows it.
But there are a lot of pain to discover the truth and we have to endure it.
It is not an easy thing for the victims.
We also don't know their pain and we seem to reckon it.
But we never know feelings that the victims have had for a long time.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
This is a very meaningful essay in relation to the timely issue on sexual harassment.
This is a very meaningful essay in relation to the timely issue on sexual harassment.
Sexual harassment doesn\'t recognize any gender.
You can be a male or a female and you can still end up being a victim.
It is really difficult for the victims because the trauma stays with them for a long time.
I hope that this issue will be resolved and those people who are involved in carrying out this heinous crime would soon pay for it.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름]
The sexual harassment is a big issue in Korea, too.>> Sexual harassment is a big issue in Korea, too.
The harassment becomes prevalent every area even in the bureaucracy.
>> Harassment becomes prevalent in every area even in the bureaucracy.
The Hollywood\'s actresses have recently announced the experience that they got some assaults by the power.
The Hollywood\'s actresses have recently announced the experience that they got some assaults by the power.
>> The Hollywood\'s actresses have recently announced the assaultive experiences that they got from some powerful people.
It\'s so called by \'me-too\'.
It\'s so called by \'me-too\'.
>> It\'s so called, \'me-too\'.
Many celebrity who we already know is included in the list of the sexual harassment.
Many celebrity who we already know is included in the list of the sexual harassment.
>> Many celebrities who we already know are included in the list on sexual harassment.
Until now, anybody who was pointed as an assaulter doesn\'t apologize for it.
Until now, anybody who was pointed as an assaulter doesn\'t apologize for it.
>> Until now, anybody who was pointed as an assaulter hasn\'t apologized for it.
The persons who have the power want to use it even it is wrong.
The persons who have the power want to use it even it is wrong.
>> The persons who have the power want to use it even if it is wrong.
They think that nobody knows their behaviors.
They think that nobody knows their behaviors.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They think that nobody can see what they are doing.
There is no secret in the world.
There is no secret in the world.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There is no secret that would not be discovered.
It would not discover right now and the victims get a lot of pain from it.
It would not discover right now and the victims get a lot of pain from it.
>> If it is not discovered, the victims get a lot of pain from it.
However, the truth finally discover and everybody knows it.
However, the truth finally discover and everybody knows it.
>> However, the truth was finally discovered and everybody knows it.
But there are a lot of pain to discover the truth and we have to endure it.
But there are a lot of pain to discover the truth and we have to endure it.
>> But there are a lot of pain from discovering the truth and we have to endure it.
It is not an easy thing for the victims.
It is not an easy thing for the victims.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is a tough time for the victims.
We also don\'t know their pain and we seem to reckon it.
We also don\'t know their pain and we seem to reckon it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We don\'t know what they are going through and we seem to reckon it.
But we never know feelings that the victims have had for a long time.
But we never know feelings that the victims have had for a long time.
>> But we would never know the feelings that the victims have had for a long time.
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