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2018-06-14 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Q: One of the most common mental health problems is depression. Give one cause of depression. A:For me, one of the reason of depression is circumstance. If I were with my friends, I could not get enough feeling any depression. But If I were in home or staying alone, I would get time to think something too deep myself and then make me depressed.

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Happy Thursday! Thank you so much for doing your homework.

You did a good job in answering the question, however, I have made some modification for you to review later on.

_T. Mayleen :)


Q: One of the most common mental health problems is depression. Give one cause of depression.


A:For me, one of the reason of depression is circumstance.

>>> There are some circumstance that lead to depression.
If I were with my friends, I could not get enough feeling any depression.

>>> If I have my friends with me, I wouldn\'t feel depressed.

But If I were in home or staying alone, I would get time to think something too deep myself and then make me depressed.

>>> But if I\'ll just stay alone at home, I would have time to think deep about myself and that could make me feel depressed.

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