6-12th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Have ever thought the living in the mountain alone?
In Korea, there are some wild animals in the mountains.
But we could not see them well in a day since they usually do at night.
If you live in the mountain alone, you might the wild animals at night.
Wild tigers lived in Korea, but all of them almost was hunted by some hunters in the period of Japanese occupation.
Many Korean were so scared the tiger but it was very familiar.
So, Japanese wanted to terminate the spirit of Korean, and then the tiger was a proper symbol.
To kill the tigers all over the country, they promoted it and the hunters got the prize instead of killing the tigers.
Nowadays, we could not find the wild Korea tigers in the mountain, we are very familiar with the tiger.
Many years ago, I have heard about the Korea tiger in North-Korea at the Beakdu mountain.
The tiger in the mountain the highest predator was disappeared.
The wild boar becomes the boss even it is not the predator.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! :)
Thank you for writing this essay.
Thank you for writing this essay.
I think many of our majestic animals are almost gone.
It\'s sad to know that Korean tigers have gone extinct.
I wonder how Korean tigers looked like.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
Let\'s see each other again next week. ^^
Enjoy your weekend with your wife and kids.
Enjoy your weekend with your wife and kids.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
Have ever thought the living in the mountain alone?>> Have you ever thought of living in the mountain alone?
In Korea, there are some wild animals in the mountains.
In Korea, there are some wild animals in the mountains.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are some wild animals in the mountains here in Korea.
But we could not see them well in a day since they usually do at night.
But we could not see them well in a day since they usually do at night.
>> But we could not see them well in the day since they usually go out at night.
If you live in the mountain alone, you might the wild animals at night.
If you live in the mountain alone, you might the wild animals at night.
>> If you live in the mountain alone, you might see the wild animals at night.
Wild tigers lived in Korea, but all of them almost was hunted by some hunters in the period of Japanese occupation.
Wild tigers lived in Korea, but all of them almost was hunted by some hunters in the period of Japanese occupation.
>> Wild tigers lived in Korea but almost all of them were hunted down by some hunters in the Japanese colonization.
Many Korean were so scared the tiger but it was very familiar.
>> Many Koreans were so scared of tigers but it was very familiar to them.
So, Japanese wanted to terminate the spirit of Korean, and then the tiger was a proper symbol.
So, Japanese wanted to terminate the spirit of Korean, and then the tiger was a proper symbol.
>> So, the Japanese wanted to terminate the spirit of Koreans by hunting down the tigers since it was a proper symbol.
To kill the tigers all over the country, they promoted it and the hunters got the prize instead of killing the tigers.
To kill the tigers all over the country, they promoted it and the hunters got the prize instead of killing the tigers.
>> [Do you mean]: To eliminate all the tigers all over the country, they asked the hunters to do kill them and gave them a prize for doing it.
Nowadays, we could not find the wild Korea tigers in the mountain, we are very familiar with the tiger.
Nowadays, we could not find the wild Korea tigers in the mountain, we are very familiar with the tiger.
>> Nowadays, we could not find the wild Korean tigers in the mountains. We are very familiar with the tiger.
Many years ago, I have heard about the Korea tiger in North-Korea at the Beakdu mountain.
Many years ago, I have heard about the Korea tiger in North-Korea at the Beakdu mountain.
>> Many years ago, I (had) heard about the Korean tiger in North-Korea at the Beakdu mountain.
The tiger in the mountain the highest predator was disappeared.
The tiger in the mountain the highest predator was disappeared.
>> The tiger in the mountain which is the strongest predator had disappeared.
The wild boar becomes the boss even it is not the predator.
The wild boar becomes the boss even it is not the predator.
>> The wild boar became the boss even if it is not the predator.
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