6,13th 6,16th my homework

2014-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

학생이 쓴 원문

My privacy include my besutiful life. For exsmple, learning English, dress up mysrlf, pray God fot help and service for neighbots so on. 16th I think the sunset is more beautifull. Because I can see very beautiful scenrry and it can make me with modesty.

강사 첨삭

Hello again Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for sending your composition.
I appreciate it a lot.
But please do not forget to read the corrections that I have written below.
Thanks for today!
Take care and see you!

Always,
Kathrine ^^

My privacy include my besutiful life.
>> My privacy includes my beautiful life.
For exsmple, learning English, dress up mysrlf,
pray God fot help and service for neighbots so on.
>> For example, learning English, dressing myself up, praying to God, helping and giving service to the neighbors, and so on.
16th
I think the sunset is more beautifull.

>> I think that sunset is more beautiful.
Because I can see very beautiful scenrry and
it can make me with modesty.
>> Because I can see the very beautiful scenery and it makes me feel modest.

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