6-13th Homework

2018-02-12 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

In a dark night, we don't want to walk alone because of a hidden scare in the dark. When we walk down the road as talking about the scare in the dark night, we usually say that we scare more a human than a ghost. It's because the ghost could not hurt us but the human could do that. That's why the human is more dangerous than the ghost in the dark night. Of course, there are some who believe the existing of the ghost. Sometimes, the scared stories that are said in the media are so scared to me. I don't want to experience like that. When I was young, I went to my mother's hometown in the vacation. In the dark night, if we want to buy something at the store which was far away from the house, we have to pass by the forest of bamboos. Specially, in the windy night, when the wind went through the forest, it sounded from the forest. It was further scared even in the night with a full moon. We could see around in the bright but we felt further scared since some sounds leak from the forest.

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In a dark night, we don\'t want to walk alone because of a hidden scare in the dark.
>>In a dark night, we don\'t want to walk alone because there might be scary creatures hidden in the dark.
When we walk down the road as talking about the scare in the dark night, we usually say that we scare more a human than a ghost.
>>When we walk down the road talking about scary things, we usually say that we\'re more scared of humans than ghosts.
It\'s because the ghost could not hurt us but the human could do that.
>>That\'s because the ghost could not hurt us but humans could.
That\'s why the human is more dangerous than the ghost in the dark night.
>>That\'s why humans are more dangerous than ghosts in a dark night.
Of course, there are some who believe the existing of the ghost.
>>Of course there are people who believe that ghosts exist.
Sometimes, the scared stories that are said in the media are so scared to me.
>>Sometimes, the scary stories that I watch make me feel scared.
I don\'t want to experience like that.
>>I don\'t want to experience that.
When I was young, I went to my mother\'s hometown in the vacation.
>>When I was young, I went to my mother\'s hometown when it was my vacation.
In the dark night, if we want to buy something at the store which was far away from the house, we have to pass by the forest of bamboos.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: When it\'s dark and we want to buy something at the store which is far from our house, we need to pass by a forest of bamboos.
Specially, in the windy night, when the wind went through the forest, it sounded from the forest.
>>When it\'s windy, the howling of the trees can be heard and the sound is like coming from the forest.
It was further scared even in the night with a full moon.
>>It was really scary even if it was a full moon.
We could see around in the bright but we felt further scared since some sounds leak from the forest.
>>We could see around because it was bright but we got more scared because of the sounds coming from the forest.

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