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What is your favorite place in your city and why?
In my city, there are a few places within ten minutes distance by driving near where I live now. A big pond around which I can take a walk and a huge theme park are among those. The former is what my wife likes to go and the latter is the place my daughter loves to go. Actually, we have the annual memberships for the park.
And we go to the East Sea thesedays since my daugher loves to play with the sand on the beach. The beach sand is really soft, compared to the on on the land
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Hi [이름]!
Wow, you live in the wonderful place. There is a lot of access to beautiful cites. I\'m happy for you!
In my city, there are a few places within ten minutes distance by driving near where I live now.
>> In my city, there are a few places within ten minutes distance by driving, near where I live now.
A big pondaround which I can take a walk and a huge theme park are among those.
>> There is a big pond here where I can talk walks. There\'s also a huge theme park here.
The former is what my wife likes to go and the latter is the place my daughter loves to go.
>> The \"Former\" is the place where my wife likes to go to and the \"Latter\" is my daughter\'s favorite.
Actually, we have the annual memberships for the park.
>> Actually, we have an annual memberships for the park.
>> Actually, we have an annual memberships for the park.
And we go to the East Sea thesedays since my daugher loves to play with the sand on the beach.
>> We usually go to the East Sea these days since my daughter loves to play with the sand on the beach.
The beach sand is really soft, compared to the on on the land
>> The beach sand is really soft, compared to the ones on the land.
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