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What holiday do you think should be removed from your country and why?
>I don\'t see any reason of any holiday here that has to be removed. Instead, I need more new holidays to be made, designated as National Holidays. The weekends and the holidays mean a lot to me. I quit working in a private company and decided to study to get a job as civil servant. Even though I earned a lot of money while working in the company, I had no free time after the official work hours on weekdays and even on weekends. I worked like a machine everyday. Sometimes I had to work until 2 am, got back to my house at around 3 am and came back to the office by 8 am. If I hadn\'t been a machine, what other things could have been called a machine? I couldn\'t see any bright future with my future family that I had imagined to have. And now? I\'m content with my job.
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Hi U [이름]!
Yes, we need more holidays. People are like robots nowadays. We don\'t have any social life anymore. We need to have more days to lay off.
I don\'t see any reason of any holiday here that has to be removed.
>>I don\'t see any reason why any holiday should be removed here in our country.
Instead, I need more new holidays to be made, designated as National Holidays.
>> Instead, we need more new national holidays.
The weekends and the holidays mean a lot to me.
>> The weekends and holidays mean a lot to me.
I quit working in a private company and decided to study to get a job as civil servant.
>> CORRECT
Even though I earned a lot of money while working in the company, I had no free time after the official work hours on weekdays and even on weekends.
>> Even though I earned a lot of money while working in the company, I had no free time after working hours on both weekdays and weekends.
I worked like a machine everyday.
>> CORRECT
Sometimes I had to work until 2 am, got back to my house at around 3 am and came back to the office by 8 am.
>> Sometimes I had to work until 2 am, go back to my house at around 3 am and come back to the office by 8 am.
If I hadn\'t been a machine, what other things could have been called a machine?
>> If I was not like a machine, then what is?
I couldn\'t see any bright future with my future family that I had imagined to have.
>> I couldn\'t see any bright future with family that I imagined to have.
And now? I\'m content with my job.
>> Now, I am contented with my job.
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