6-17th Homework
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강사 첨삭
Hello there! Good morning to you! ^^
Thank you very much for your message. All the athletes really did their best that’s why many people enjoyed watching it.
The Olympic games is going on in the peak.
>>The Olympic Games are going on.
>>The Olympic is at its peak
Some athletes got a medal, some didn\'t get a medal even though they did their
best.
>>Some athletes got medals and some didn’t even though they
did their best.
I would like to give my congratulation to
medalists and I would like to give my consolation to others.
>>I would like to congratulate the medalists and I would like
to commend the other athletes.
To participate in the Olympic games is honorable itself, I think.
>>I think it is an honor to participate in the Olympics.
They competed with others as representative of their countries.
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>>They represent their countries and had competed with other
athletes.
I could not measure on their efforts but I felt it as watching a TV.
>>I don’t know how much effort they’d exerted but I felt it as
I was watching them on TV.
Many people prepared the Olympic games in order to carry out smoothly and
without any accidents.
>>Many people prepared for the Olympic Games for it to be successful
without any problem.
Many volunteers are participated in the all area even though it was very cold.
>>Many volunteers participated and helped the athletes even
though it was very cold.
The temperature of the area where is held the Olympic games is very low.
>>The temperature in the area where they held the Olympic Games
is very low.
That\'s why it is the winter Olympic games.
>>That’s why it is called Winter Olympic Games.
All games is held on the ice or snow.
>>All games are held on the ice or snow.
This weekends the Olympic games will be ended and we won\'t see some games that
is so exciting.
>>This weekend, the Olympic Games will end and we won’t see
some games that are so exciting.
Last night, I saw the relay game of the women short track with my colleagues.
>>Last night, I saw the replay of the women short track with
my colleagues.
It was a very fantastic experience and I was so happy.
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>>The game was really fantastic and I was so happy.
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