6-17th Homework

2018-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

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The Olympic games is going on in the peak. Some athletes got a medal, some didn't get a medal even though they did their best. I would like to give my congratulation to medalists and I would like to give my consolation to others. To participate in the Olympic games is honorable itself, I think. They competed with others as representative of their countries. I could not measure on their efforts but I felt it as watching a TV. Many people prepared the Olympic games in order to carry out smoothly and without any accidents. Many volunteers are participated in the all area even though it was very cold. The temperature of the area where is held the Olympic games is very low. That's why it is the winter Olympic games. All games is held on the ice or snow. This weekends the Olympic games will be ended and we won't see some games that is so exciting. Last night, I saw the relay game of the women short track with my colleagues. It was a very fantastic experience and I was so happy.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Good morning to you! ^^

Thank you very much for your message. All the athletes really did their best that’s why many people enjoyed watching it.

The Olympic games is going on in the peak.

>>The Olympic Games are going on.

>>The Olympic is at its peak
Some athletes got a medal, some didn\'t get a medal even though they did their best.

>>Some athletes got medals and some didn’t even though they did their best.
I would like to give my congratulation to medalists and I would like to give my consolation to others.

>>I would like to congratulate the medalists and I would like to commend the other athletes.
To participate in the Olympic games is honorable itself, I think.

>>I think it is an honor to participate in the Olympics.
They competed with others as representative of their countries.

>correct

>>They represent their countries and had competed with other athletes.
I could not measure on their efforts but I felt it as watching a TV.

>>I don’t know how much effort they’d exerted but I felt it as I was watching them on TV.
Many people prepared the Olympic games in order to carry out smoothly and without any accidents.

>>Many people prepared for the Olympic Games for it to be successful without any problem.
Many volunteers are participated in the all area even though it was very cold.

>>Many volunteers participated and helped the athletes even though it was very cold.
The temperature of the area where is held the Olympic games is very low.

>>The temperature in the area where they held the Olympic Games is very low.
That\'s why it is the winter Olympic games.

>>That’s why it is called Winter Olympic Games.
All games is held on the ice or snow.

>>All games are held on the ice or snow.
This weekends the Olympic games will be ended and we won\'t see some games that is so exciting.

>>This weekend, the Olympic Games will end and we won’t see some games that are so exciting.
Last night, I saw the relay game of the women short track with my colleagues.

>>Last night, I saw the replay of the women short track with my colleagues.
It was a very fantastic experience and I was so happy.

>correct

>>The game was really fantastic and I was so happy.

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