6-18th Homework

2018-03-12 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

학생이 쓴 원문

Now, it is March. In every March, I couldn't understand its weather. It would be strange since the weather that I have to understand is not an object. It is only a phenomenon of the nature. Nowadays, the pollution by humans affects the nature so that the level of sea would become high. But all government over the world doesn't care about it. The first thing that the governments always think is the benefit. I heard something about the environment of the earth one day. It was about the master of the earth. Humans misunderstand of the master of the earth. They think the master of earth themselves. But it is not true. Humans are very tiny things when we consider the history of the earth. Before humans emerged, another conqueror of the earth was the dinosaurs for a very long time. But they were also extincted even though they lived in the earth for a long time without hardness. Human's history is very short if it compare with the dinosaur's history. However, humans act like a conqueror.

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Hi [이름]!
Thank you for doing your best to express yourself in the composition that you made. Great work on that. Please check on the corrections provided. If you have further questions don\'t hesitate to ask me.
Thank you and I\'ll see you tomorrow!
T. Anne^^

Now, it is March.
>>CORRECT!
In every March, I couldn\'t understand its weather.
>>Every March, I couldn\'t understand the weather.
It would be strange since the weather that I have to understand is not an object.
>>CORRECT!
>>It would be difficult to explain because the weather is not an object.
It is only a phenomenon of the nature.
>>It is only a natural phenomenon.
Nowadays, the pollution by humans affects the nature so that the level of sea would become high.
>>Nowadays, pollution caused by humans affect the nature; for example, bodies of water become contaminated.
But all government over the world doesn\'t care about it.
>>But the governments all over the world don\'t care about it.
The first thing that the governments always think is the benefit.
>>The first thing that the government should think about is the welfare of the people.
I heard something about the environment of the earth one day.
>>I heard something about the environment the other day.
It was about the master of the earth.
>>It was about who the master of the earth was.
Humans misunderstand of the master of the earth.
>>Humans misunderstand the master of the earth.
They think the master of earth themselves.
>>Humans think that they are the masters of the earth.
But it is not true.
>>CORRECT!
Humans are very tiny things when we consider the history of the earth.
>>Humans are very tiny creations as far as the history of the earth is concerned.
Before humans emerged, another conqueror of the earth was the dinosaurs for a very long time.
>>Before the humans were born, dinosaurs were the first ones to live on the earth.
But they were also extincted even though they lived in the earth for a long time without hardness.
>>But they got extinct even though they lived on the earth for a long time without hardships.
Human\'s history is very short if it compare with the dinosaur\'s history.
>>Human\'s life span is very short compared to the dinosaur\'s life span.
However, humans act like a conqueror.
>>However, humans act like conquerors.

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