6-19th Homework

2018-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Trainee

학생이 쓴 원문

Have you ever thought about the reason of your life? Or have you every considered how to live your life? We are always a main actor in our life even if we are a poor or a loser. We always stay in center of our life until we pass away. One day, I experienced the death of my relative who was close to me. At that time, I reckoned the life was simple. Human's life is very short but we want to carry out something in our life. Also, some one might succeed their goal in their life but it would be very difficult. But they want to do it so that they could not feel like that. In my case, I don't have any ambition like admirable person in the world. I just want to live without hardship in my whole life. It would seem to be simple at the glance. The normal life without any hardship is not easy to sustain in a whole life. From time to time, there would be a certain determination in order to select a right road in your life. If you step into a wrong road, it would undergo the hardship.

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Have you ever thought about the reason of your life?
Or have you every considered how to live your life?


We are always a main actor in our life even if we are a poor or a loser.

>>We are always the main character in our lives, regardless of how rich or poor, cool or lame we are.

We always stay in center of our life until we pass away.

>>We remain in the center until we pass away.

One day, I experienced the death of my relative who was close to me.

>>I experienced losing a relative who was close to me. 

At that time, I reckoned the life was simple.

>>At that time, I realized that life was simple.

Human\'s life is very short but we want to carry out something in our life.

>>A human\'s life is very short and we want to carry out something in our lives.

Also, some one might succeed their goal in their life but it would be very difficult.

>>Also, some might succeed with their goals in life but it would be difficult.

But they want to do it so that they could not feel like that.

>>But they want to succeed so they don\'t feel unaccomplished.

In my case, I don\'t have any ambition like admirable person in the world.

>>In my case, I don\'t have any ambitions like these people the world admires.

I just want to live without hardship in my whole life.

>>I just want to live without hardship throughout my life.

It would seem to be simple at the glance.

>>It seems simple through a glance.

The normal life without any hardship is not easy to sustain in a whole life.

>>A normal, easy, life is not going to sustain me.

From time to time, there would be a certain determination in order to select a right road in your life.

>>There comes a time that there will be something that will motivate you to choose the right road in your life.

If you step into a wrong road, it would undergo the hardship.

>>If you step into the wrong road, we would undergo hardship throughout our lives.

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