6/20 Wiriting Task
학생이 쓴 원문
Q: Do you think it\'s right that animals are kept in zoos or not?
A:
I think it is not right! The meaning of keeping animals in zoos is close to human\'s joy.
When people make a documentary about ecosystem, they don\'t touch anything that weak aninmals are attacked by predator. Likewise we should keep respect animal as a part of ecosystem. Although there are some advantages such as protecting endagnered species and saving some animals that need to help.
강사 첨삭
Thank you very much for submitting your answer, Rachel! It\'s nice to see your writing skills in English as well. I can understand the message you want to tell me, there are just some grammatical parts that we need to fix. However, I still encourage you to continue writing answers for your homework, so you can also familiarize yourself and get used to writing in English. This will be the perfect practice for you~ Well done! (^・ω・^ )
~T.Harmony <3
>> CORRECT!
The meaning of keeping animals in zoos is close to human\'s joy.
>> The meaning of keeping animals in zoos is to provide joy to humans.
When people make a documentary about ecosystem, they don\'t touch anything that weak aninmals are attacked by predator.
When people make a documentary about ecosystem, they don\'t touch anything that weak aninmals are attacked by predator.
>> ...,they don\'t touch anything that might cause weak animals to be attacked by a predator.
Likewise we should keep respect animal as a part of ecosystem.
>> Likewise, we should keep respecting animals as part of the ecosystem.
Although there are some advantages such as protecting endagnered species and saving some animals that need to help.
>> ...protecting endangered species...
(For this one, I just corrected your spelling of \"endangered\" ^^)
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