6-20th Homework

Hi [이름],

How are you doing?  

I did several revisions on your composition, but overall, it was good.

Should you have any questions, please ask me or T. Anne.

Thank you.

Cheers,

Amanda ^-^

Oh, my god. My last writing was terrible.

>> Oh, my God! My last composition was terrible. (I\'m sure it\'s not, don\'t be hard on yourself [이름].) ^-^

 I couldn\'t get any points.

>> I couldn\'t express my thoughts well. 

 Anyway, my country underwent a war about 60 years ago.

>> Correct

>> OR: Anyway, my country went through war with north Korea about 60 years ago. 

 
 And we have been under the war since that time.

>> And we\'ve been at war with North Korea since that time.

The Korean War stopped in 1953 but it was not terminated.

>> Correct 

>> OR: The Korean War ended in a ceasefire in 1953, but the two Koreas are still technically at war. 

 North Korea and America agreed with stopping the war and they signed it.

>> North Korea and America agreed to end the war by drawing a written understanding which was signed by both countries.

>> OR: The war continued until the signing of the armistice in July 1953.

*** armistice: a temporary suspension of hostilities (war) by agreement of the warring parties; truce.

 Ironically, there was South Korea in the treaty.

>>  Ironically, South Korea was included in the treaty.

 The treaty has been kept until now. so we live under the war that doesn\'t end.

>> The treaty has been kept until now, so we live under a war that doesn\'t seem to end. 

 Nowadays, some countries that are related with the war start to talk about it together.

>>  Nowadays, some countries that are related (connected) with the war starts to talk about it together.

 In the center of it, there is South Korea that is the parties concerned.

*** I\'m not exactly sure what you\'re trying to say, so I can\'t revise this sentence yet.

 Absolutely, we want for the peace to be settled down in the Korea peninsula.

>> Absolutely, we want peace to be settled in the Korean peninsula.

 Finally, we want to be reunified sometime.

>>  Finally, we want to be reunified sometime in the near future.

 I think this time is very important to do it.

>> It is very important for both countries to be at peace. I think now is the best time to do it.

>> OR:  It is very important for both countries to be at peace,`` and I think there\'s no better time to do it than at present.

In a table for the conversation, there were many opinions for carrying out the final goal that everybody wanted.

>> There were many opinions to carry out to achieve the final goal that everybody wanted.

>> OR: Many options were laid on the table to achieve the final goal that everybody wanted, but in the end, the final agreement was not carried out.

 It was just a negotiation and finally the agreement was not carried out.

>> Correct

 It was not the responsibility of one country.

>> Correct