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2014-06-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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Your correction is very helpful to me, so I want to check my university class homework. Thank you all the time :) 1) In other presentations, a speaker stands and other audiences seat thair chair, for instance employee-boss and actor-audience. I think standing in a class don't show the "power relation". 2) Students wear school uniforms and they are in a same place, it makes the students have identity. When students go outside of school, the sense of belonging lasts to them. 3) Supermarkets do sales event and free-sample food booth to encourage customers to purchase more than him originally wanted. 4) I think "power relation" is more compulsory than sales strategy of supermarkets. 5) nations, companies, organizations manipulate people with organization of space. This is artful so people don't feel this actions. That is a reason we should be concerned organization of space.

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Good morning!
Thank you for entrusting me with this.
Anyway, I hope I understood your ideas correctly.
See you tomorrow!
Enjoy your class!
~T. Jessie~
Your correction is very helpful to me, so I want to check my university class homework.
>>
Your correction is very helpful to me, so I want you to check my university class homework.
Thank you all the time :)

>> Correct!
1) In other presentations, a speaker stands and other audiences seat thair chair, for instance employee-boss and actor-audience.
>> In some presentations, a speaker stands and the audience sit on their chair, for instance employee-boss and actor-audience.
I think standing in a class don\'t show the \"power relation\".
>>
I think standing in a class doesn\'t show \"power relation\".
2) Students wear school uniforms and they are in a same place, it makes the students have identity.

>> Correct!
When students go outside of school, the sense of belonging lasts to them.
>> When students go outside the school , the sense of belonging lasts to them.
3) Supermarkets do sales event and free-sample food booth to encourage customers to purchase more than him originally wanted.
>> Supermarkets do sales event and free-sample food booth to encourage customers to purchase more than they originally wanted.
4) I think \"power relation\" is more compulsory than sales strategy of supermarkets.
>> Correct!
5) nations, companies, organizations manipulate people with organization of space.
>> Nations, companies and organizations manipulate people by organizing the space.
This is artful so people don\'t feel this actions.
>> This is artistic so people don\'t feel it.
OR>> Do you mean to say: They do this artistically so people don\'t know about it.
That is a reason we should be concerned organization of space.
>> That is a reason why we should be concerned with the organization of space.

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