6/25 homework

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for this heartfelt essay.

I think you were very honest with your answer in this question.

I seriously think BTS is making a big difference on the lives of the people not only in your country but on other countries as well.

It takes a strong will and a compassionate heart to do what they are doing for others.

I\'m glad to know that you found a good role model to follow. ^_^

See you on our first official class together next week.
Have a great weekend. :)
~Teacher Charry

I would say that BTS is the most admire person I\'ve ever thought.

>> I would say that the BTS members are the persons I admire the most.

OR >> The most admirable persons I could think of are, the members of the Korean boy band BTS.

Of course I\'m a big fan of them but also learned lots of things from them. .

>> Of course I\'m a big fan of them but I also learned lots of things from them.

They have connected their song\'s main topic to social issues.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> The theme of most of their songs are related to social issues.

For instance, Love yourself which BTS\'s newest album has message compassion and love myself.

>> For instance, Love Yourself which is BTS\'s newest album has a message about compassion and love for one\'s self.

So they collaborated with UNISEF and decided to donate 5% of album profits.

>> So they collaborated with UNISEF and decided to donate 5% of the album\'s profits.

They show how celebrities use their affection well.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> They show how compassionate celebrities could be.  

I got impression with their honesty activity, realized that artist got to do best heartfully both their field and In general.

>> [Do you mean]: I got a good impression about their honest acts and realized that artists can show a good heart both in their field and in life in general.

That\'s why I deem BTS as my roll model.

>> That\'s why I deem BTS as my role model.