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I like to chat with any people such as friends, family, and my husband.
When I chat with them, I feel become calm down and some worries are disappeared.
When I was an undergraduate student, I talked with my friend so much every day even after going back to home by message.
Now we have a different job and working in the daytime.
So, we can not chat like girls.
However, sometimes I feel depressed or upset with someone, I talk to my friend or husband.
During talking with them, I can find naturally what they need now.
To my friends who feel depressed very much after the birth of their baby, I sent flowers and cakes.
I know the postnatal depression is a very serious problem for mothers.
My friend who got the presents was very happy even for a while.
I heard that men generally dosen\'t like to say their worry or mind to others, but, many women like to chat and share their thinking with others.
I think this is a very good way to relieve the stress before it gets worse.
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I like to chat with any people such as friends, family, and my husband.
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When I chat with them, I feel become calm down and some worries are disappeared.
When I chat with them, I feel become calm down and some worries are disappeared.
>> When I chat with them, I feel calm and my worries seem to disappear.
When I was an undergraduate student, I talked with my friend so much every day even after going back to home by message.
When I was an undergraduate student, I talked with my friend so much every day even after going back to home by message.
>> When I was still an undergraduate student, I used to talk to my friend so much every day even after going home through chat or text.
Now we have a different job and working in the daytime.
Now we have a different job and working in the daytime.
>>Now we have different jobs and we always work on daytime.
So, we can not chat like girls.
So, we can not chat like girls.
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However, sometimes I feel depressed or upset with someone, I talk to my friend or husband.
However, sometimes I feel depressed or upset with someone, I talk to my friend or husband.
>> However, whenever I feel depressed or upset with someone, I talk to my friend or husband.
During talking with them, I can find naturally what they need now.
During talking with them, I can find naturally what they need now.
>> While talking with them, I can sense what they really need.
To my friends who feel depressed very much after the birth of their baby, I sent flowers and cakes.
To my friends who feel depressed very much after the birth of their baby, I sent flowers and cakes.
>> To my friends who felt depressed after the birth of their baby, I would send flowers and cakes.
I know the postnatal depression is a very serious problem for mothers.
I know the postnatal depression is a very serious problem for mothers.
>> correct
My friend who got the presents was very happy even for a while.
My friend who got the presents was very happy even for a while.
>> I made my friend happy even for a short time through my presents.
I heard that men generally dosen\'t like to say their worry or mind to others, but, many women like to chat and share their thinking with others.
I heard that men generally dosen\'t like to say their worry or mind to others, but, many women like to chat and share their thinking with others.
>> I heard that men generally doesn\'t like to share their worries or thoughts to others but, many women like to chat and share their thoughts with others.
I think this is a very good way to relieve the stress before it gets worse.
I think this is a very good way to relieve the stress before it gets worse.
>> correct
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