6.26 Homework

2015-06-26 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Hi there! Good morning! Finally, it's burning Friday! How would the world be different if there was no poverty? If there was no poverty, it's a Utopia. I also want that people all over the world are wealthy. But I don't think it will be fun to be like that, because aim to reach better life gives us much more desire and interesting. I think that a process is very important. Thank you!

강사 첨삭

Hello Mr. [이름]! You are right, it\'s burning Friday again! I know that you are excited already. Anyway, have fun and enjoy your time with your family. Thanks for your homework.^^ ~Kelly^^ Hi there! Good morning! >> Correct.Finally, it\'s burning Friday! >> Correct.How would the world be different if there was no poverty?If there was no poverty, it\'s a Utopia. >> Correct.I also want that people all over the world are wealthy. >> I also want that people all over the world to be wealthy. But I don\'t think it will be fun to be like that, because aim to reach better life gives us much more desire and interesting. >> But I don\'t think it will be fun to be like that, because aiming to reach a better life gives us much desire and interest. I think that a process is very important. >> I think that process is very important.Thank you! >> Correct.

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