6/29 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I will say that we want to focus on our dream of each other and we are very happy now.
So, we think that having children is not necessary to be a happy family.
I have a strong passion to do research and educate young scientists and engineers.
I think they are kind of my children.
My husband is also working hard in his company for ten years.
He feels so rewarding in his work and wants to be promoted to the top of the company.
We are not just workaholic.
I think a workaholic is a person who just working hard without an exact purpose.
My husband and I have a dream.
My husband wants to contribute to many people telecommunication technology as much as possible.
I want to produce smart and great students as young scientists and engineers.
So, I want to increase science and technology level of my country on the world stage.
Family life with children will be happy, but our dream is also very worth dream.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
You and your husband\'s dream are amazing. A few people would do that, but you guys are willing to help the society and the world, so kudos to you and your husband!
-Rachel
I will say that we want to focus on our dream of each other and we are very happy now.
>> I will say that each of us wants to focus on our dreams, and we are very happy now.
So, we think that having children is not necessary to be a happy family.
So, we think that having children is not necessary to be a happy family.
>> correct
I have a strong passion to do research and educate young scientists and engineers.
I have a strong passion to do research and educate young scientists and engineers.
>> correct
I think they are kind of my children.
I think they are kind of my children.
>> I think they are somewhat my children.
My husband is also working hard in his company for ten years.
My husband is also working hard in his company for ten years.
>> My husband has also been working hard in his company for ten years.
He feels so rewarding in his work and wants to be promoted to the top of the company.
He feels so rewarding in his work and wants to be promoted to the top of the company.
>> His job is rewarding and he wants to be promoted to the top.
We are not just workaholic.
We are not just workaholic.
>> correct
I think a workaholic is a person who just working hard without an exact purpose.
I think a workaholic is a person who just working hard without an exact purpose.
>> I think a workaholic is someone who just works hard without any specific purpose.
My husband and I have a dream.
My husband and I have a dream.
>> correct
My husband wants to contribute to many people telecommunication technology as much as possible.
My husband wants to contribute to many people telecommunication technology as much as possible.
>> correct ( perhaps it would be better to use introduce instead of contribute)
I want to produce smart and great students as young scientists and engineers.
I want to produce smart and great students as young scientists and engineers.
>> correct
So, I want to increase science and technology level of my country on the world stage.
So, I want to increase science and technology level of my country on the world stage.
>> correct
Family life with children will be happy, but our dream is also a very worth dream.
Family life with children will be happy, but our dream is also a very worth dream.
>> correct
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