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When i was six to thirteen years old, I was child swimming athletic.
But my favorite sports is dodge ball playing. And I feel proud when our team has win.
Moreover, i was good at defense. I feel excited and very delight.
Then I wanted to participated in dodge ball club when I was fourteen years old.
But I failed a dodge club exam. I was so sad about this fact.
My major is dancing at the moment, I feel passion while I\'m dancing.
Especially, I feel bliss through standing on the stage at the moment.
Beside I can\'t feel pain that was get practice during the course of standing on the stage.
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When i was six to thirteen years old, I was child swimming athletic.
>> I excelled in swimming when I was young between the ages of six and thirteen.
But my favorite sports is dodge ball playing.
But my favorite sports is dodge ball playing.
>> However, playing dodge ball is one of my favorite sports.
And I feel proud when our team has win.
>> I also feel proud everytime our team wins.
Moreover, i was good at defense. I feel excited and very delight.
Moreover, i was good at defense. I feel excited and very delight.
>> I was also skilled at defense. I feel excited and delighted.
Then I wanted to participated in dodge ball club when I was fourteen years old.
Then I wanted to participated in dodge ball club when I was fourteen years old.
>> When I was fourteen years old, I decided to take part in dodge ball club.
But I failed a dodge club exam. I was so sad about this fact.
But I failed a dodge club exam. I was so sad about this fact.
>> However, I failed the dodge club exam. It made me feel very sorrowful.
My major is dancing at the moment, I feel passion while I\'m dancing.
My major is dancing at the moment, I feel passion while I\'m dancing.
>> I was already majoring in dance at the time, and I was a passionate dancer.
Especially, I feel bliss through standing on the stage at the moment.
Especially, I feel bliss through standing on the stage at the moment.
>> Right now, standing on the stage in particular makes me joyous.
Beside I can\'t feel pain that was get practice during the course of standing on the stage.
Beside I can\'t feel pain that was get practice during the course of standing on the stage.
>> Furthermore, I am pain-free despite practicing and standing on stage.
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