6-29th Homework

2018-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

학생이 쓴 원문

All of us is living in the earth that is only one in the universe. There is fewer people who saw the earth in the space. Many scientists want to know the origin of the universe. So, they use the microwave telescope that is mounted in the space near the earth. And many satellite are moving around the earth's orbit for being responsible for the communication. For communicating and spying other countries, some nations launched several satellite into the space. But some problems are arising now. In the earth's orbit, there are many garbage that is changed from the satellites. The satellite is an artificial thing, so it has a duration time. At the end of the time, it would become garbage that is not able to be clean. Nowadays, the space station made by China was broken and it would fall into the earth. The fallen time may be April 1 or 2. The station would be burned down because of the air of the earth. I think this case would be more happened. And in the space there are many debris.

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All of us is living in the earth that is only one in the universe.

>>All of us are living in the earth which is the only one in the universe.
There is fewer people who saw the earth in the space.

>>There is only a few people who saw the earth when they went to the space.
Many scientists want to know the origin of the universe.

>>CORRECT!
So, they use the microwave telescope that is mounted in the space near the earth.

>>So, they use the microwave telescope that is mounted in the space near the earth.

And many satellite are moving around the earth\'s orbit for being responsible for the communication.

>>Many satellites are moving around the earth\'s orbit and they\'re responsible for the communication purposes.
For communicating and spying other countries, some nations launched several satellite into the space.

>>Other nations launched several satellites into space for communication purposes and for them to use it in spying the other countries.
But some problems are arising now.

>>CORRECT!
In the earth\'s orbit, there are many garbage that is changed from the satellites.

>>In the earth\'s orbit there are many garbage which can affect how the satellite works.
The satellite is an artificial thing, so it has a duration time.

>>The satellite is an artificial thing, so it has a duration.
At the end of the time, it would become garbage that is not able to be clean.

>>When that time comes, it would just become a garbage which could not be cleaned.
Nowadays, the space station made by China was broken and it would fall into the earth.

>>CORRECT!
The fallen time may be April 1 or 2.

>>It may have fallen already to the Earth\'s atmosphere but I\'m not sure about it.
The station would be burned down because of the air of the earth.

>>They say that the station may be burned because of the air in the Earth\'s atmosphere.
I think this case would be more happened.

>>I think this case may happen.
And in the space there are many debris.

>>There are many debris in the space.

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