6/5 homework

2018-06-07 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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[Write an essay about the most inspiring story that you've heard or read] Nowadays, I summit my application to get a job in an university. This is competition among the many researchers. I often feel uneasy, and sometimes it makes me sad. Everyone want to get a better job as soon as possible. Meanwhile, a few month ago, I found one women researcher's story in the news. She is about 50 years old. And she is temporary researcher in the university. By the way, she published the excellent paper now. Her study is very important influence on the unrevealed reason of Alzheimer's disease. She said she just did her work and interesting regardless of the job position. I was profoundly impressed, and I thought I also must be relaxed and study hard.

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~Teacher Shanee^^,


[Write an essay about the most inspiring story that you\'ve heard or read]

Nowadays, I summit my application to get a job in an university.

>>> Nowadays, I submit my application to get a job in a university.
 This is competition among the many researchers.

>>> This is a competition among many researchers.
 I often feel uneasy, and sometimes it makes me sad. 

>>> I often feel uneasy and sometimes sad.
 Everyone want to get a better job as soon as possible.

>>> Everyone wants to get a better job as soon as possible.
 Meanwhile, a few month ago, I found one women researcher\'s story in the news.

>>> Meanwhile, a few months ago, I found a female researcher\'s story in the news.
 She is about 50 years old. 

>>> Correct!
 And she is temporary researcher in the university. 

>>> And she is a temporary researcher in the university.
 By the way, she published the excellent paper now. 

>>> She published an excellent paper recently.
 Her study is very important influence on the unrevealed reason of Alzheimer\'s disease. 

>>> Her study is very important for it has a connection to the unrevealed reason of Alzheimer\'s disease.
 She said she just did her work and interesting regardless of the job position. 

>>> She said she just did her work with enthusiasm regardless of the job position.
 I was profoundly impressed, and I thought I also must be relaxed and study hard.

>>> I was profoundly impressed, and I thought I must also relax and study hard.

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