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[Write an essay about the most inspiring story that you\'ve heard or read]
Nowadays, I summit my application to get a job in an university.
>>> Nowadays, I submit my application to get a job in a university.
This is competition among the many researchers.
>>> This is a competition among many researchers.
I often feel uneasy, and sometimes it makes me sad.
>>> I often feel uneasy and sometimes sad.
Everyone want to get a better job as soon as possible.
>>> Everyone wants to get a better job as soon as possible.
Meanwhile, a few month ago, I found one women researcher\'s story in the news.
>>> Meanwhile, a few months ago, I found a female researcher\'s story in the news.
She is about 50 years old.
>>> Correct!
And she is temporary researcher in the university.
>>> And she is a temporary researcher in the university.
By the way, she published the excellent paper now.
>>> She published an excellent paper recently.
Her study is very important influence on the unrevealed reason of Alzheimer\'s disease.
>>> Her study is very important for it has a connection to the unrevealed reason of Alzheimer\'s disease.
She said she just did her work and interesting regardless of the job position.
>>> She said she just did her work with enthusiasm regardless of the job position.
I was profoundly impressed, and I thought I also must be relaxed and study hard.
>>> I was profoundly impressed, and I thought I must also relax and study hard.
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