6/5 homework

2018-06-07 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q: Write about an enjoyable or memorable experience with a special person. Explain what made this event so memorable. A: Yes, I got experience about memorable person. His name is Shiori who is my friend's husband. I've met him when I went to Germany first time, He was cook in Japanese restaurant. I heard how was he so enthusiastic and goal-oriented person, I got a little shock after watching he does. He only focused on making own recipe and girlfriend, it means he was not interested in others. Time passed, When I visited Germany again, He opened his restaurant and I was invited. I felt that he definitely an cook also artist. He never did anything easily, took time to show perfectly. And result was perfect. So as to I got big inspired by him as an artist, He has became one of memorable person I ever met.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for doing your homework, Won!

I think we would think that the moment is special if we spent it with a memorable person^^

Q:
Write about an enjoyable or memorable experience with a special person. Explain what made this event so memorable.
>>CORRECT!
A:

>>CORRECT!
 Yes, I got experience about memorable person.

>> Yes, I got an experience about a memorable person.

His name is Shiori who is my friend\'s husband.

>>CORRECT!

I\'ve met him when I went to Germany first time, He was cook in Japanese restaurant.

>>I met him when I went to Germany for the first time, and he was a cook in a Japanese restaurant.

 I heard how was he so enthusiastic and goal-oriented person, I got a little shock after watching he does.

>> I heard how enthusiastic and goal-oriented person he was, I got a little shocked after watching what he does.

He only focused on making own recipe and girlfriend, it means he was not interested in others.

>>He only focused on making his own recipe and being with his girlfriend, it means he was not interested in others.

Time passed, When I visited Germany again, He opened his restaurant and I was invited.

>>Time passed, when I visited Germany again, he opened his restaurant and I was invited.

 I felt that he definitely an cook also artist.

>> I felt that is not only a cook, but also an artist.

 He never did anything easily, took time to show perfectly.

>> He never did anything easily, and it took time to show perfectly.

And result was perfect.

>>And the result was perfect.

So as to I got big inspired by him as an artist, He has became one of memorable person I ever met.

>>As I got to be majorly inspired by him as an artist, he has become one of memorable people I have ever met.

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