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I consider true love as my major achievement in life.
I think it could be a husband or children or family.
It should be human, not work.
Work is a very important thing for me, but I feel happy with my people.
When I am with people who I love and love me, I feel I\'m a worthy person.
However, it\'s not mean that we should choose one between love and work.
Working completes my life.
When I\'m good at work, It makes me feel like I\'m a valuable being in both house and society.
We can not choose only one because we need to earn money from work to have a happy family and family should be happy and peaceful to focus on work.
I sincerely believe it.
I have an experience when I was arguing with my husband and working in a bad mood, I felt like my work wasn\'t going well.
I know that we have to focus on the family at home in order to have a good balance.
Therefore, I meet my husband every weekend and I focus on him when I with him.
I\'m not a perfect guy, but I want to kill two birds with one stone.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Asking you to write about life topics is great because you freely express your mind, so it also allows me to learn some things from you. Thank you for doing so:)
-Rachel
I consider true love as my major achievement in life.
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>> I consider finding my true love as my major achievement in life.
I think it could be a husband or children or family.
I think it could be a husband or children or family.
>> I think it could be having a husband, children and family.
It should be human, not work.
It should be human, not work.
>> Our achievement should be related to humans not work.
Work is a very important thing for me, but I feel happy with my people.
Work is a very important thing for me, but I feel happy with my people.
>> correct
When I am with people who I love and love me, I feel I\'m a worthy person.
When I am with people who I love and love me, I feel I\'m a worthy person.
>> correct
However, it\'s not mean that we should choose one between love and work.
However, it\'s not mean that we should choose one between love and work.
>> However it doesn\'t mean that we should between love and work.
Working completes my life.
Working completes my life.
>> correct
When I\'m good at work, It makes me feel like I\'m a valuable being in both house and society.
When I\'m good at work, It makes me feel like I\'m a valuable being in both house and society.
>> correct
We can not choose only one because we need to earn money from work to have a happy family and family should be happy and peaceful to focus on work.
We can not choose only one because we need to earn money from work to have a happy family and family should be happy and peaceful to focus on work.
>> correct
I sincerely believe it.
I sincerely believe it.
>> correct
I have an experience when I was arguing with my husband and working in a bad mood, I felt like my work wasn\'t going well.
I have an experience when I was arguing with my husband and working in a bad mood, I felt like my work wasn\'t going well.
>> I once experienced arguing with my husband and working in a bad mood.
I know that we have to focus on the family at home in order to have a good balance.
I know that we have to focus on the family at home in order to have a good balance.
>> correct
Therefore, I meet my husband every weekend and I focus on him when I with him.
Therefore, I meet my husband every weekend and I focus on him when I with him.
>> correct
>> Therefore, I visit my husband every weekend and just focus on him when we are together.
I\'m not a perfect guy, but I want to kill two birds with one stone.
I\'m not a perfect guy, but I want to kill two birds with one stone.
>> correct
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