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Please write about your last vacation with the whole family.
On my last vacation with my family, we went to the west sea in the cold winter. There is a large island on the west sea that my dad lived about 20 years ago. My family arrived there at about 2 o\'clock in the noon. We ate a simple lunch in a near restaurant. After we were full, we road to get inside the island. My family and I walked around the shore. We watched the sunset and took many pictures in front of the beach. We had planned to eat dinner there at first, but it seemed that the traffic jam would be too bad after dinner. When we started to go out of the island, the road was closed because of high tide. We waited for about an hour to get out. On our way home, Mom and I slept through the drive. I was so exhausted that I fell as[이름]p right after I came home.
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Hi [이름]. Thanks for sharing your fun experiences with your family.
-T. Gabby :)
On my last vacation with my family, we went to the west sea in the cold winter.
On my last vacation with my family, we went to the west sea in the cold winter.
>> Correct.
There is a large island on the west sea that my dad lived about 20 years ago.
>> Correct.
My family arrived there at about 2 o\'clock in the noon.
>> Correct.
We ate a simple lunch in a near restaurant.
>> We ate simple lunch in a nearby restaurant.
After we were full, we road to get inside the island.
>> After we ate, we went inside the island.
My family and I walked around the shore.
>> Correct.
We watched the sunset and took many pictures in front of the beach.
>> Correct.
We had planned to eat dinner there at first, but it seemed that the traffic jam would be too bad after dinner.
>> We planned to have our dinner there but we realized that the traffic might be worse after dinner.
When we started to go out of the island, the road was closed because of high tide.
>> When we went out of the island, the road was closed due to high tide.
We waited for about an hour to get out.
>> Correct.
On our way home, Mom and I slept through the drive.
>> Mom and I slept on our way home.
I was so exhausted that I fell as[이름]p right after I came home.
>> I was so exhausted that I fell as[이름]p right after we arrived home.
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