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학생이 쓴 원문
When I was young, I was very poor.
So I want to be a rich woman until recently.
However, I know now that our health is very important more than money.
These days I feel it so I want to be health with my family to come many years.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [이름]!
Have you heard of the popular saying, \"Health is wealth?\" I guess most people don\'t realize how important health is until they experience health related problems. I am like that too. For this New year, I wish you good health, happiness and long life with your family. See you tomorrow!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
When I was young, I was very poor.
>> correct!
So I want to be a rich woman until recently.
>> So I wanted to become a rich woman until recently.
However, I know now that our health is very important more than money.
>> correct!
OR>> Now, I realized that health is more important than money or wealth.
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