6-7th Homework

Hello, [이름]!

I love your essay today.

You have lots of good sentences. ^^
Thank you very much for writing them.

It\'s good to know that you have learned to manage your fears.

Cheers! ^_^

See you again next week.

Take care always.

~Teacher C[이름]

When I first got on an airplane, I was so nervous.

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OR >> When I first rode an airplane, I was so nervous.
Specially, when the airplane took off, the feeling was very strange to me.

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OR >> I especially felt that way when the airplane took off because it felt very strange to me.
It seemed to get on the biking vessel in the amusement park.

>> It seemed like getting on a biking vessel in the amusement park.
Do you know the biking vessel in the amusement park?

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OR >> Are you familiar with the biking vessel in the amusement park?
The vessel is very popular to young girls and boys.

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OR >> This vessel is well-known among young girls and boys.
The first thing that I was nervous was to take off.

>> The first thing that I was nervous about was the take off.
The second thing that I was embarrassed was the turbulence in the sky.

>> The second thing that I was embarrassed about was the turbulence in the sky.
Whenever the airplane faces the turbulence, even if the size of the airplane is very big, it will be shaken.

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OR >> Whenever the airplane faces a turbulence, even it will still shake even if the size of the airplane is very big.

The fluctuation in the sky make me nervous and it make me remind the air clash.

>> The fluctuation in the sky makes me nervous and it reminds of the air clash.
Those are still to make me nervous.

>> Those still make me (feel) nervous.
Additionally, one that makes me anxious was to enter the immigration.

>> Additionally, another thing that makes me anxious is entering the immigration.
An official always asks me why I come here.

>> An official always asks me why I went there. 

Sometimes, I could not understand one\'s words so I could not answer anything.

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OR >> I sometimes could not understand one\'s words so I could say anything.
The time was before studying English officially.

>> That time was before I officially started studying English.
But now I have already studied English and I have had several times to go abroad.

>> But now that I already study English, I was able to go abroad several times. 

Nowadays, I don\'t feel nervous.

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OR >> I don\'t feel nervous anymore.