6/8 homework

2020-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I think adoption is a very careful issue. If we would adopt, we have to think a lot and consider many things. Many people have a prejudice for the adoption and separate adopted children from mother-born children. Many people became a happy family after adoption, but many parents are secondarily hurting as they give up adoption. Having children requires a big responsibility. And once we are adopted, we can\'t go back to adoption. If we can have a happy life without children, maybe that\'s better. I want to have a baby in the future. But I still don\'t know if I want to have children by adoption. My husband said if we can\'t have a baby naturally, it\'s better to live just two of us. I agree with it. I have never think about adoption very seriously. And it\'s not clear why I want children. Someone says having a child complete the family, and someone happiness increases many times after giving birth. Maybe all of them are right. I firstly have to make a family plan with reason.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], 
As always,  you are much appreciated for your insight on this topic. For some, it is considered a controversial issue, but you gamely answered the question anyway, so thanks for that. ^ ^
I think adoption is a very careful issue.
>> correct 
If we would adopt, we have to think a lot and consider many things.
>> correct
Many people have a prejudice for the adoption and separate adopted children from mother-born children.
>> Many people have a prejudice for adopted children and those who were born of their own parents. 
Many people became a happy family after adoption, but many parents are secondarily hurting as they give up adoption.
>> correct
Having children requires a big responsibility.
>> correct
And once we are adopted, we can\'t go back to adoption.
>> And once we opted for adoption, we can\'t turn back on our decision. 
If we can have a happy life without children, maybe that\'s better.
>> correct
I want to have a baby in the future. 
But I still don\'t know if I want to have children by adoption.
>> correct
My husband said if we can\'t have a baby naturally, it\'s better to live just two of us.
>> correct
I agree with it.
>> correct 
I have never think about adoption very seriously.
>> I have never thought seriously about adoption. 
And it\'s not clear why I want children.
>> correct
Someone says having a child complete the family, and someone happiness increases many times after giving birth.
>> Someone said, having a child completes the family and some say happiness increases much after giving birth. 
Maybe all of them are right.
>> correct 
I firstly have to make a family plan with reason.
>> Firstly, I have to make a family plan with reason. 

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