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If I have my own children in the future, I want to inculcate values to them without physical punishment.
I heard that we should avoid inculcation until 3 years old since young babies can\'t understand that.
Therefore, it\'s best to pretend not to know the wrong for toddlers.
Human can understand humans\' saying and think after three years old.
So, we can inculcate them after 36 months old.
I don\'t want to punish physically my children.
I think it\'s really important to make the basis for conversation.
Sometimes parents upset and angry to their children without enough explanation.
It can make them apologize to escape the scary situation.
The most important thing is understanding that my parents discipline for me.
They have to believe that even if their parents scold them, there is nothing to give up or hate.
Home should be a haven where I can rest and relax, not a scary or insecure place.
I believe that children who have grown up with a lot of love become people who can give love.
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Hi [이름],
Whoa! I think this homework is the record-holder when it comes to the time you spend in doing your homework because by far this one is the fastest. Anyway, thanks again for sharing your insights on this topic. I agree with your final statement that children who grew in an environment filled with love are the ones who love generously also.
-Rachel
If I have my own children in the future, I want to inculcate values to them without physical punishment.
>> correct
I heard that we should avoid inculcation until 3 years old since young babies can\'t understand that.
I heard that we should avoid inculcation until 3 years old since young babies can\'t understand that.
>> correct
Therefore, it\'s best to pretend not to know the wrong for toddlers.
Therefore, it\'s best to pretend not to know the wrong for toddlers.
>> Therefore, it\'s best to let mistakes slide for toddlers.
Human can understand humans\' saying and think after three years old.
Human can understand humans\' saying and think after three years old.
>> Humans can comprehend language and thinking if they are over three years old.
So, we can inculcate them after 36 months old.
So, we can inculcate them after 36 months old.
>> So we can start inculcating values to them after 36 months.
I don\'t want to punish physically my children.
I don\'t want to punish physically my children.
>> I don\'t want to physically punish my children.
I think it\'s really important to make the basis for conversation.
I think it\'s really important to make the basis for conversation.
>> correct
Sometimes parents upset and angry to their children without enough explanation.
Sometimes parents upset and angry to their children without enough explanation.
>> Sometimes parents get upset and angry to their children without giving them enough explanation.
It can make them apologize to escape the scary situation.
It can make them apologize to escape the scary situation.
>> So the children apologize to avoid the scary situation.
The most important thing is understanding that my parents discipline for me.
The most important thing is understanding that my parents discipline for me.
>> The most important thing is to make the kids understand why their parents discipline them.
They have to believe that even if their parents scold them, there is nothing to give up or hate.
They have to believe that even if their parents scold them, there is nothing to give up or hate.
>> correct
Home should be a haven where I can rest and relax, not a scary or insecure place.
Home should be a haven where I can rest and relax, not a scary or insecure place.
>> correct
I believe that children who have grown up with a lot of love become people who can give love.
I believe that children who have grown up with a lot of love become people who can give love.
>> correct
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