6-9th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
When I write an essay in the composition board, I freely open my writing.
For the first time, I didn't want to open my writing since I didn't have a brave.
It's because I was so shy on my writing.
So, I could not get some advantages through opening my writing to everybody.
The first that I could not get the advantage was the points that I could use as changing into some free classes.
The second that I didn't get was my courage.
I think opening my writing is for me to make the sentence seriously.
Anyway, I always open my writing now and I don't care about it.
Sometimes, I see the number of reading my writing.
When I saw the high score, I indeed proud me even though there were many errors.
In my case, I had the additional class for using the point that I got through opening my writing.
So, if someone see this writing, I recommend that you open your writing to everybody.
When I wrote the essay for the first time, it took a hour to write down completely.
And there were many errors.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
I\'m really happy that you have found the courage to openly write and share your essays.
You have come a long way and I am proud of you.
I think you are a great example to others.
Always remember that practice makes perfect.
Doing the things that scare us make us better and wiser.
I hope you\'re doing great. ^^
See you again tomorrow.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름]
When I write an essay in the composition board, I freely open my writing.>> When I write an essay in the composition board, I freely write.
For the first time, I didn\'t want to open my writing since I didn\'t have a brave.
For the first time, I didn\'t want to open my writing since I didn\'t have a brave.
>> During the first time, I didn\'t want to openly write since I was not brave.
It\'s because I was so shy on my writing.
It\'s because I was so shy on my writing.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s because I was so shy about my writing skill.
So, I could not get some advantages through opening my writing to everybody.
So, I could not get some advantages through opening my writing to everybody.
>> [Do you mean]: So, I could not take advantage of openly writing to everybody.
The first that I could not get the advantage was the points that I could use as changing into some free classes.
The first that I could not get the advantage was the points that I could use as changing into some free classes.
>> The first thing that I could not take advantage of were the points that I could use to have some free from diligently writing.
The second that I didn\'t get was my courage.
The second that I didn\'t get was my courage.
>> The second thing that I didn\'t get was my courage.
I think opening my writing is for me to make the sentence seriously.
I think opening my writing is for me to make the sentence seriously.
>> I think openly writing made me create sentences seriously.
Anyway, I always open my writing now and I don\'t care about it.
Anyway, I always open my writing now and I don\'t care about it.
>> Anyway, I always openly write now and I don\'t care about it.``
Sometimes, I see the number of reading my writing.
Sometimes, I see the number of reading my writing.
>> [Do you mean]: Sometimes, I see how many people read what I wrote.
When I saw the high score, I indeed proud me even though there were many errors.
When I saw the high score, I indeed proud me even though there were many errors.
>> When I see a high score, I am indeed proud even though there were many errors.
In my case, I had the additional class for using the point that I got through opening my writing.
>> In my case, I had the additional classes for using the points that I got through openly writing.
So, if someone see this writing, I recommend that you open your writing to everybody.
So, if someone see this writing, I recommend that you open your writing to everybody.
>> So, if someone is reading this essay, I recommend that you openly write to everybody.
When I wrote the essay for the first time, it took a hour to write down completely.
When I wrote the essay for the first time, it took a hour to write down completely.
>> When I wrote the essay for the first time, it took an hour to write it down completely.
And there were many errors.
And there were many errors.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There were also a lot of errors.
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