63. Homework

2018-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree? I think that is related with the situations. When I was a student and I chosen meals for lunch and dinner, I only considered about the price and amount of foods. At that time, the quality was not important than the volume for me. I didn’t have enough money buying something to eat since I didn’t want to ask my parents money. Thus, I preferred foods to fill my stomach instead of buying good quality foods. Furthermore, I needed to save money for a date with my girlfriend. Hence, most of the times I ate two bananas and serials with milk for every dinner and it helped my body losing weight about 10 kg as well. On the other hand, now, I am earning enough money to buy foods, goods and what I want so I prefer to have delicious foods rather than to eat big size of foods with untasty even if it has small amount size. However, when I buy a cell phone, I consider its brand. In my opinion, most of the smart phones are the same because I just use it for call, search the internet, kakao talk, and Facebook. But, if I use it for playing game, I might think specifications about batteries, screen size, memories, graphics and CPU. That’s because I don’t want to see buffering while I am playing games. So, I favor to have smart phone from LG since the company do a lot of good contributes. The company supports the teams in winter Olympics that is not familiar with the people since it has never gotten a medal even once, and the company supports the families whose were boned from the parents who has experiences about national of merit because they have been living very poverty, it’s an irony. In conclusion, I just partly agree with the question since it is interconnected with people’s situations, opinions, finances, and etc.

강사 첨삭


Thank you for doing your homework, Jason^^

Price is indeed important nowadays, especially when the economy is moving at a snail pace~

However, I hope that the quality never gets compromised.

See you tomorrow :)
Q. Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?
>>CORRECT!
I think that is related with the situations.
>>
I think that is related to the following situations.
When I was a student and I chosen meals for lunch and dinner, I only considered about the price and amount of foods.
>>
When I was a student and I chose meals for lunch and dinner, I only considered the price and the amount of food.
 At that time, the quality was not important than the volume for me.
>>
 At that time, the quality was not as important as the volume for me.
 I didn’t have enough money buying something to eat since I didn’t want to ask my parents money.
>>
 I didn’t have enough money to buy something to eat since I didn’t want to ask my parents for money. 
Thus, I preferred foods to fill my stomach instead of buying good quality foods.
>>
Thus, I preferred foods to fill my stomach instead of buying food with good quality .
 Furthermore, I needed to save money for a date with my girlfriend.
>>
Furthermore, I needed to save money for dates with my girlfriend. 
Hence, most of the times I ate two bananas and serials with milk for every dinner and it helped my body losing weight about 10 kg as well.
>>
Hence, most of the times I ate two bananas and cereals with milk every dinner and it helped my body lose about 10 kg as well.
On the other hand, now, I am earning enough money to buy foods, goods and what I want so I prefer to have delicious foods rather than to eat big
  size of foods with untasty even if it has small amount size.
>>
On the other hand, now, I am earning enough money to buy food, goods and what I want, so I prefer to have delicious food rather than to eat
a big serving of food which has a bad taste.

However, when I buy a cell phone, I consider its brand.
>>CORRECT!
 In my opinion, most of the smart phones are the same because I just use it for call, search the internet, kakao talk, and Facebook.
>>
 In my opinion, most of the smart phones are the same because I just use it for calling, searching the internet, Kakao Talk, and Facebook.
 But, if I use it for playing game, I might think specifications about batteries, screen size, memories, graphics and CPU.
>>
But, if I use it for playing games, I might think specifications about batteries, screen size, memory, graphics and CPU. 
That’s because I don’t want to see buffering while I am playing games.
>>
That’s because I don’t want to experience buffering while I am playing games. 
So, I favor to have smart phone from LG since the company do a lot of good contributes.
>>
So, I favor to have smartphone from LG since the company makes a lot of good attributes.
 The company supports the teams in winter Olympics that is not familiar with the people since it has never gotten a medal even once,
and the company supports the families whose were boned from the parents who has experiences about national of merit
because they have been living very poverty, it’s an irony.
>>
The company supports the teams in Winter Olympics that is not familiar with the people since it has never gotten a medal even once, 
and the company supports the families whose parents had national merit, because they have been living under poverty, it’s an irony.

In conclusion, I just partly agree with the question since it is interconnected with people’s situations, opinions, finances, and etc.
>>CORRECT!

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