65. Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Thank you very much, Jason^^
The Internet has influenced me negatively as well as positively, ha! ha!
It gives me a lot of information necessary to teach my students and myself :)
On the other hand, blogs about cosmetics severely damage my wallet, ha! ha!
See you later~
Q. Has the Internet changed your life in any way?
>>CORRECT!
I started learning about how to use the internet when I entered in an elementary school.
>>I started learning about how to use the Internet when I entered in an elementary school.
From the day, I use to search the information that I want to find.
>>Since that day, I have been using it to search the information that I want to find.
Hence, I don’t need to spend wasting time to find it.
>>Hence, I don’t need to waste time finding it.
Furthermore, it helps me to have creative thinking because some information is blocked or prohibited to surf or download it by the police or companies.
>> Furthermore, it helps me to cultivate creative thinking because some information is blocked or prohibited to be surfed or downloaded it the police or companies.
For example, if I want to find a latest movie, I need to think about the title in English or Chinese or put dots between word and word.
>> For example, if I want to find the latest movie, I need to think about the title in English or Chinese or put dots between words.
That’s because most of movies that are be able to be downloaded have been uploaded by other countries especially China.
>>That’s because most movies that can be downloaded have been uploaded by other countries especially China.
And then, it helps me reduce time making documents since it has broad data.
>> And then, it helps me reduce time making documents since it has a broad range of data.
Moreover, I am able to learn what I am interested in through online-videos in the Youtube.
>> Moreover, I am able to learn what I am interested in through online videos on YouTube.
Thus, I can save a time to get an academy or reduce cost as well.
>>Thus, I can save a time to get into an academy or reduce cost as well.
Anyways, I have gotten much kind of benefits from the developed internet services rather than disadvantages.
>>Anyways, I have gotten many kinds of benefits from the developed Internet services rather than disadvantages.
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