Write about your greatest achievement.
학생이 쓴 원문
Having beloved wife and children can be one of greatest achievements. I don\'t think there was much other than them. Of course, I have made some small achievements at work, but they were not big in my entire life.
Aside from my family, I want to make another big outcome by speaking English fluently enough to talk to foreigners without any inconvenience.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Steve! Thank you for doing your homework. You
did well in terms of spelling. However, please be careful with word usage.
- Debbie
Having beloved wife and children can be one of greatest achievements.
>> Having my beloved wife and children can be one of my greatest achievements.
I don\'t think there was much other than them.
>> I don\'t think there is anything greater than them.
Of course, I have made some small achievements at work, but they were not big in my entire life.
>> Of course, I have made some small achievements at work, but they are not crucial for my life.
Aside from my family, I want to make another big outcome by speaking English fluently enough to talk to foreigners without any inconvenience.
>> Aside from my family, I want to make another big accomplishment: to speak English fluently enough to talk to foreigners without any inconvenience.
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