66. Homework
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Thank you very much for doing your homework, Jason^^
I always think that others are better than me, not because I lack confidence, but because I think it can help me better myself :)
See you^^
Q. In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?
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In my opinion, some people work harder than others in education and employment since they are eager to get an achievement.
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And I guess that they have realized they don’t have any talents or abilities then others if they compare to other companions.
>> And I guess that they have realized they don’t have any talents or abilities then others if they compare themselves to their other companions.
Hence, they have chosen to work harder since they, including me, believed in the sentence ‘An effort will not betray’.
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I am afraid to tell this is not always a good thing.
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That\'s because the person who steals someone\'s endeavor reaching just his purpose will give him depressed.
>>That\'s because a person who steals someone\'s endeavor reaching just his purpose will give him depressed.
However, I think try to do the best at their position or situation is better than to being living lazy.
>>However, I think trying to do the best at their position or situation is better than to living lazily.
Q. Do you think people should be completely free to say whatever they want?
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It is good way to say something whatever they want freely.
>>It is a good way to say something we want freely.
But I don’t agree that people should be completely free every situations.
>>But I don’t agree that people should be completely free in every situation.
Sometimes, it might broke communication and make an atmosphere to be bad.
>> Sometimes, it might break communication and make an atmosphere bad.
However, I think, if they are placed in an absurd situation, they should tell what they feel about that situation and it has to be completely free.
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I guess people who has enrolled an activity called ‘#me too’ just hid their feeling at that time since they were afraid to make ruined circumstances.
>> I guess people who have enrolled in an activity called ‘#me too’ just hid their feeling at that time since they were afraid to make ruined circumstances.
So they posted memories that they had gotten by the strange persons and wrong people will be gone few days later.
>>So they posted memories that they had received from strange persons and they will be gone a few days later.
Accordingly, I think it will make better generation.
>>Accordingly, I think it will make a better generation.
Hence, I support them to fix wrong custom to be right.
>>Hence, I support them to make wrong customs right.
I don’t have any idea how to finish this answer since, in my opinion, people should not be completely free to say whatever they want but I don’t have any supporting ideas just now since I am really tired.
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Thus, I just want to finish this homework.
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See you tomorrow.
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