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2020-07-01 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I don\'t have any plans to do research or teach in Japan now. I finished my postdoctoral fellow well, and it was a very nice experience in my life. Now, I want to do my research and teach students in my country. I have a research goal that the dry processing technology of Korea will be the top of the world stage. However, I want to collaborate with the research institute in Japan. Research communication and collaboration is a very good chance to improve me and my students\' ability. When I was in graduate school, my supervisor holds on a regular small conference with Japan\'s university because my supervisor got Ph.D. in Japan. It was a good experience to meet foreigners and present my research in English. It makes me feel the English presentation or expression is easier and improve my communication skill with foreigners. Therefore, I want to give the experiences to my students in the future. It will be competitiveness of my students in the society.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],
You really have a passion for educating your students and for doing research. I am sure your students will be very grateful to you one day for showing and teaching them the right way. ^^
-Rachel
I don\'t have any plans to do research or teach in Japan now.
>> correct
I finished my postdoctoral fellow well, and it was a very nice experience in my life.
>> I finished my postdoctoral fellowship well, and ti was a very nice experience in my life. 
Now, I want to do my research and teach students in my country.
>> correct
I have a research goal that the dry processing technology of Korea will be the top of the world stage.
>> I have a goal that the dry processing technology in Korea will reach the top in the world stage. 
However, I want to collaborate with the research institute in Japan.
>> correct
Research communication and collaboration is a very good chance to improve me and my students\' ability.
>> correct 
When I was in graduate school, my supervisor holds on a regular small conference with Japan\'s university because my supervisor got Ph.D. in Japan.
>> When I was in graduate school, my supervisor held regular mini-conferences with Japanese universities because he got his Ph.D in Japan. 
It was a good experience to meet foreigners and present my research in English.
>> correct
It makes me feel the English presentation or expression is easier and improve my communication skill with foreigners.
>> It made me think that the English presentation is easier and it improved my communication skills with foreigners. 
Therefore, I want to give the experiences to my students in the future.
>> Therefore, I want to let my students experience the same in the future.
It will be competitiveness of my students in the society.
>> It will make them competitive in the society. 

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