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A: Children’s Grand Park
I want to introduce Children’s Grand Park in Seoul as the most beautiful place in Korea. I went there last week for the first time and I really touched on that place. The size is so huge, and there are lots of themes botanical garden, zoo, amusement park etc. I enjoyed as a kid looking around the place and realized this place give me unconventional experiences. So I recommend this place for the most beautiful place in Korea, especially in Seoul.
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Hi, Sandy! Thank you so much for answering your homework. :)
I really appreciate it! ~
Keep it up :)
-T. Nikki ^^
I want to introduce Children’s Grand Park in Seoul as the most beautiful place in Korea.
>> I want to introduce the Children’s Grand Park in Seoul as the most beautiful place in Korea.
I went there last week for the first time and I really touched on that place.
>> I went there last week for the very first time and that place really touched me.
The size is so huge, and there are lots of themes botanical garden, zoo, amusement park etc.
>>The place was so huge and there were lots of botanical gardens, a zoo, an amusement park and a lot more.
I enjoyed as a kid looking around the place and realized this place give me unconventional experiences.
>> When I was a kid, I just enjoyed looking around. Now, as an adult, I realized that this place gave me unconventional experiences.
So I recommend this place for the most beautiful place in Korea, especially in Seoul.
>> So, I am recommending this place as the most beautiful place not just in Seoul but in the whole Korea.
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