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Salary is a very important motivation to work hard.
Too low salary destroy motivation.
However, if the salary is enough to live my life, I want to focus on the objectives of the research and education.
I hope to not forget the mind when I prepared the various applications and interviews.
I think that humans cannot forcibly pull money, money just follows a person\'s effort.
Unfortunately, not all efforts come with money.
So, it is not good to focus on materialistic compensation.
I think I have a strong desire to win fame.
I believe that I can satisfy the desire from the rewarding of education and research.
The rewarding will give me money too.
I want to promote as soon as possible and achieve recognition in the society.
It makes me work hard and looking forward to my future.
Now, I think I raised one step, and I will meet many stairs that I never knew before.
I am very exciting, and I already got a lot of energy to educate and do research.
I will be a good teacher and researcher.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Thanks for sharing your opinion on this topic. It is truly insightful. While a high salary is good for motivation, it should not be the focus of a person. A person should always give his or her best in everything he/she does.^ ^
-Rachel
Salary is a very important motivation to work hard.
>> correct
Too low salary destroy motivation.
Too low salary destroy motivation.
>> Having a low salary destroys someone\'s motivation.
However, if the salary is enough to live my life, I want to focus on the objectives of the research and education.
However, if the salary is enough to live my life, I want to focus on the objectives of the research and education.
>> However, if the salary is enough for survival, I want to focus on the objectives of my research and my teaching.
I hope to not forget the mind when I prepared the various applications and interviews.
I hope to not forget the mind when I prepared the various applications and interviews.
>> I hope not forget the time when I prepared my various application for interviews.
I think that humans cannot forcibly pull money; money just follows a person\'s effort.
I think that humans cannot forcibly pull money; money just follows a person\'s effort.
>> correct
Unfortunately, not all efforts come with money.
>> correct
>> Unfortunately, not all effort are well compensated.
So, it is not good to focus on materialistic compensation.
So, it is not good to focus on materialistic compensation.
>> correct (awesome sentence)
I think I have a strong desire to win fame.
I think I have a strong desire to win fame.
>> correct
>> I think I have a strong desire for fame.
I believe that I can satisfy the desire from the rewarding of education and research.
I believe that I can satisfy the desire from the rewarding of education and research.
>> I believe that I can get the satisfaction from the reward I get from teaching and doing research.
The rewarding will give me money too.
The rewarding will give me money too.
>> The reward will give me money too.
I want to promote as soon as possible and achieve recognition in the society.
I want to promote as soon as possible and achieve recognition in the society.
>> I want to get promoted as soon as possible and achieve recognition from the society.
It makes me work hard and looking forward to my future.
It makes me work hard and looking forward to my future.
>> It makes me want to work hard and look forward to my future.
Now, I think I raised one step, and I will meet many stairs that I never knew before.
Now, I think I raised one step, and I will meet many stairs that I never knew before.
>> Now I think I have reached the high steps, and I will encounter more step that I never knew before.
I am very exciting, and I already got a lot of energy to educate and do research.
I am very exciting, and I already got a lot of energy to educate and do research.
>> I am very excited and enthusiastic to educate the students and do research.
I will be a good teacher and researcher.
I will be a good teacher and researcher.
>> correct
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