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2020-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

학생이 쓴 원문

Salary is a very important motivation to work hard. Too low salary destroy motivation. However, if the salary is enough to live my life, I want to focus on the objectives of the research and education. I hope to not forget the mind when I prepared the various applications and interviews. I think that humans cannot forcibly pull money, money just follows a person\'s effort. Unfortunately, not all efforts come with money. So, it is not good to focus on materialistic compensation. I think I have a strong desire to win fame. I believe that I can satisfy the desire from the rewarding of education and research. The rewarding will give me money too. I want to promote as soon as possible and achieve recognition in the society. It makes me work hard and looking forward to my future. Now, I think I raised one step, and I will meet many stairs that I never knew before. I am very exciting, and I already got a lot of energy to educate and do research. I will be a good teacher and researcher.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], 
Thanks for sharing your opinion on this topic. It is truly insightful. While a high salary is good for motivation, it should not be the focus of a person. A person should always give his or her best in everything he/she does.^ ^
-Rachel 
Salary is a very important motivation to work hard.
>> correct
Too low salary destroy motivation.
>> Having a low salary destroys someone\'s motivation.
However, if the salary is enough to live my life, I want to focus on the objectives of the research and education.
>> However, if the salary is enough for survival, I want to focus on the objectives of my research and my teaching.
I hope to not forget the mind when I prepared the various applications and interviews.
>> I hope not forget the time when I prepared my various application for interviews. 
I think that humans cannot forcibly pull money; money just follows a person\'s effort.
>> correct
Unfortunately, not all efforts come with money.
>> correct
>> Unfortunately, not all effort are well compensated. 
So, it is not good to focus on materialistic compensation.
>> correct (awesome sentence)
I think I have a strong desire to win fame.
>> correct
>> I think I have a strong desire for fame. 
I believe that I can satisfy the desire from the rewarding of education and research.
>> I believe that I can get the satisfaction from the reward I get from teaching and doing research.
The rewarding will give me money too.
>> The reward will give me money too. 
I want to promote as soon as possible and achieve recognition in the society.
>> I want to get promoted as soon as possible and achieve recognition from the society.
It makes me work hard and looking forward to my future.
>> It makes me want to work hard and look forward to my future. 
Now, I think I raised one step, and I will meet many stairs that I never knew before.
>> Now I think I have reached the high steps, and I will encounter more step that I never knew before. 
I am very exciting, and I already got a lot of energy to educate and do research.
>> I am very excited and enthusiastic to educate the students and do research. 
I will be a good teacher and researcher.
>> correct

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