7/18 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[Describe your dream place to live. Why would you want to live there? What would you do?]
I have a dream house for the future.
When I will be 40\'s, I want to build three houses with one public garden.
My family will live in one house of them.
My parents will live in one different house.
My parents in law will live in another house.
We can meet anytime, but, we also private.
I am a first child for my parents and my husband are also the first child for his parents.
We have some self-responsibility to take care of parents for their old age.
This is not a duty, but, many first children feel like that in Korea.
So, I want to have three houses.
I don\'t know it will be a real or just dream because it is a very expensive dream.
But, I think dreaming is a good thing in life.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for catching up with your homework. I really appreciate the effort! ^ ^
Wow! I could see your heart\'s desire and I could really say that you are a very good person and a very good daughter! ^ ^ I think for Asian people, we have the same culture. The burden of responsibility of taking care of our parents falls on the eldest child. But, for Western culture, the responsibility is with Home for the Aged and other Elderly Institutions, which I find a bit cruel. Our culture is still the best! What do you think? ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>Correct
When I will be 40\'s, I want to build three houses with one public garden.
When I will be 40\'s, I want to build three houses with one public garden.
>>When I will be in my 40\'s, I want to build three houses with one big garden.
My family will live in one house of them.
My family will live in one house of them.
>>My family will live in one of those houses.
My parents will live in one different house.
My parents will live in one different house.
>>My parents will live in the other house.
My parents in law will live in another house.
My parents in law will live in another house.
>>My parents in law will live in the other house.
We can meet anytime, but, we also private.
We can meet anytime, but, we also private.
>>We can get together anytime but also enjoy our privacy.
I am a first child for my parents and my husband are also the first child for his parents.
I am a first child for my parents and my husband are also the first child for his parents.
>>I am the first child and so is my husband.
We have some self-responsibility to take care of parents for their old age.
We have some self-responsibility to take care of parents for their old age.
>>We have the responsibility to take care of our parents when they grow old.
This is not a duty, but, many first children feel like that in Korea.
This is not a duty, but, many first children feel like that in Korea.
>>It\'s not a duty, but it\'s a Korean culture practiced from one generation to the other.
So, I want to have three houses.
So, I want to have three houses.
>>Correct
I don\'t know it will be a real or just dream because it is a very expensive dream.
I don\'t know it will be a real or just dream because it is a very expensive dream.
>>I don\'t know if it will become a reality or just a dream because it is a very expensive dream.
But, I think dreaming is a good thing in life.
But, I think dreaming is a good thing in life.
>>Correct OR
>>But I think dreaming about the future is also good; it gives you a goal and a sense of purpose. ^ ^
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