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2021-07-20 · 첨삭 강사 Ivy

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I worked at Kyoto University in Japan for two years. I was a postdoctoral fellow there, we call the position a pos-doc. My major is chemical engineering, but, I worked in the department of earth and planetary science. My research topic is plasma processing and application. I studied only in the engineering field before I went to Japan, Kyoto University wants to use plasma for the scientific field. So, they need an expert for plasma application. At that time, I thought the advantages and disadvantages both. It was a chance to expand my research range. On the other hand, my research carrier in the engineering field loses two years. Finally, I choose a challenge. I was at Inha University for ten years, so I already felt boring. It was a moment to need new things. The conclusion is satisfactory. My research range expanded and I back to the engineering field. Moreover, the research in Kyoto applying to engineering applications. And now, I\'m not afraid to new challange.

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- Teacher Ivy :)

I worked at Kyoto University in Japan for two years.

>>I worked in Japan for two years at Kyoto University.
I was a postdoctoral fellow there, we call the position a pos-doc.

>> I was a post doctoral fellow there, we call it post-doc.
My major is chemical engineering, but, I worked in the department of earth and planetary science.

>>My major is chemical engineering, but I worked in the department of earth and planetary science.
My research topic is plasma processing and application.

>>My research topic is about plasma processing and application.
I studied only in the engineering field before I went to Japan, Kyoto University wants to use plasma for the scientific field.

>> Before I went to Japan, I only studied in the engineering field. Kyoto University wanted to use plasma in the scientific field.
So, they need an expert for plasma application.

>> They needed an expert in plasma application.
At that time, I thought the advantages and disadvantages both.

>> I thought of both the advantages and disadvantages.
It was a chance to expand my research range.

>> It was a chance for me to expand my research range.
On the other hand, my research carrier in the engineering field loses two years.

>> On the other hand, my research carrier in the engineering field lost two years.
Finally, I choose a challenge.

>> I decided to choose the challenge.
I was at Inha University for ten years, so I already felt boring.

>> I was working at Inha University for ten years, it already felt boring.
It was a moment to need new things.

>> At that moment, I knew I needed to try new things.
The conclusion is satisfactory.

>> I’m satisfied with my decision.
My research range expanded and I back to the engineering field.

>> My research range expanded and I am back in the engineering field.
Moreover, the research in Kyoto applying to engineering applications.

>> Moreover, the research in Kyoto can be applied in engineering.
And now, I\'m not afraid to new challange.

>> I am no longer afraid to face a new challenge.

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