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2016-02-25 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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7 part 2 BoA who Korean pop star well-known in Japan is very famous singer in Korea and in Japan. When she was a teenager, she stayed in Japan so she always try to sing and dance. Also she studied an English and Japaness language. She couldn't go to the school because she wanted to become a famous singer. I am proud of her and many Korean singers. I think speaking a foreign language is very important to become successful in other countries. Nowadays many young people can speak a lot of foreign language so I envry them. Korean pop stars have to study to become successful but it is not easy. Its effect is that it made them very famous and popular singers. However, I think the Korea culture bomms can't be last long in Japan. Because,about twenty years, Hong Kong acts and singers were very popular in Korea but these days they are not popular in Korea. But I want to be last long the Korea culture boom in the world.

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7 part 2

BoA who Korean pop star well-known in Japan is very famous singer in Korea and in Japan.

>> BoA, who is a Korean pop start, is a well known singer both  in Japan and Korea.
 When she was a teenager, she stayed in Japan so she always try to sing and dance.

>> When she was a teenager, she stayed in Japan so she always tried to sing and dance.
 Also she studied an English and Japaness language.

>> She also studied the English and Japanese language.
 She couldn\'t go to the school because she wanted to become a famous singer.

>> correct!
 I am proud of her and many Korean singers.

>> correct! 
 I think speaking a foreign language is very important to become successful in other countries.

>> correct!  
 Nowadays many young people can speak a lot of foreign language so I envry them.

>> correct!   (envy)
 Korean pop stars have to study to become successful but it is not easy. 

>> correct!  
 Its effect is that it made them very famous and popular singers. 

>> correct!  
 However, I think the Korea culture bomms can\'t be last long in Japan.

>>  However, I think that the boom of the Korea culture can\'t last long in Japan.
 Because, about twenty years, Hong Kong acts and singers were very popular in Korea but these days they are not popular in Korea.

>> Because 20 years ago, actors and singers from Hong Kong were very popular in Korea, but they are not popular any longer these days.
 But I want to be last long the Korea culture boom in the world.

>>  But I want that the Korean culture will boom around the world.

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