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2020-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I selected a research project from government one month ago. I started to support the research budget of 45000 dollars every year for three years. I failed many times from the research submission. So, sometimes I thought that my research is maybe not interest and not important in society. However, when I knew the decision of the research budget, I felt to achieve recognition from society. The reason for this thought that this is my greatest accomplishment is this is the first research project from me. I am a research investigator on this project. I think it is very impressive start for my future. I start to take the first step, this experience will be very helpful when I try to a bigger research project. And my research view will be widened through project achievement. If I will think this moment after tens of years, it will be a very small experience. But, this is the greatest achievement in my short life now.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],
Thank you for this response. It sure is the beginning of many achievements in your life because I am certain that you can achieve more. ^^
-Rachel 
I selected a research project from government one month ago.
>> I selected a research project from the government a month ago. 
I started to support the research budget of 45000 dollars every year for three years.
>> I started with the support research budget of 45,000 US Dollars every year for three years. 
I failed many times from the research submission.
>> I failed several times in my research submission. 
So, sometimes I thought that my research is maybe not interest and not important in society.
>> So, sometimes I thought my work was not interesting or important in the society. 
However, when I knew the decision of the research budget, I felt to achieve recognition from society.
>> However, when my proposal was accepted  and was given a research budget, I felt that I got recognized by the society. 
The reason for this thought that this is my greatest accomplishment is this is the first research project from me.
>> This is why I consider this as my greatest achievement. 
I am a research investigator on this project.
>> correct
I think it is a very impressive start for my future.
>> correct
I start to take the first step, this experience will be very helpful when I try to a bigger research project.
>> I am starting to take the first step, so this experience will be beneficial when I take on bigger projects in the future. 
And my research view will be widened through project achievement.
>> correct
If I will think this moment after tens of years, it will be a very small experience.
>> correct
>> If I look back at this moment after ten years, it will be an insignificant experience. 
But, this is the greatest achievement in my short life now.
>> correct

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