7/20 homework
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I think it depends on the criterion of what is good jobs in society or personnel.
In my parents\' period, few people go to university for higher education.
However, most students go to university and it becomes a very common educational process.
It means that people without a college education have a handicap, but people with a college education don\'t have benefits.
It is quite funny, and we call it education inflation.
I believe that this social system is not good, but college education will become more important in the future.
In the fourth industrial revolution, we don\'t need to physically work because robots will do it.
Physical labor will be substituted by robots, and new jobs using humans brains will be created newly.
We need to study more and study new things.
However, a college education will be possible online too.
So, universities have to think and find a new way to survive in the complicated education market.
I think study online is okay, but we can\'t do experiments online.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I guess it is true that we have to continue learning for our own good as we are about to enter the fourth industrial revolution. Although online experiments cannot be done for now, maybe it will be possible in the future:)
-Rachel
I think it depends on the criterion of what is good jobs in society or personnel.
>> I think it depends on the criterion of what is a good job in the society or the personnel.
In my parents\' period, few people go to university for higher education.
In my parents\' period, few people go to university for higher education.
>> In my parents\' generation, few people attended universities for higher education.
However, most students go to university and it becomes a very common educational process.
However, most students go to university and it becomes a very common educational process.
>> However, most students nowadays attend universities so it is a common educational process.
It means that people without a college education have a handicap, but people with a college education don\'t have benefits.
It means that people without a college education have a handicap, but people with a college education don\'t have benefits.
>> correct
It is quite funny, and we call it education inflation.
It is quite funny, and we call it education inflation.
>> correct
I believe that this social system is not good, but college education will become more important in the future.
I believe that this social system is not good, but college education will become more important in the future.
>> correct
>> while I believe that this social system is not good, college education will become important in the future.
In the fourth industrial revolution, we don\'t need to physically work because robots will do it.
In the fourth industrial revolution, we don\'t need to physically work because robots will do it.
>> correct
Physical labor will be substituted by robots, and new jobs using humans brains will be created newly.
Physical labor will be substituted by robots, and new jobs using humans brains will be created newly.
>> Physical labor will be done by robots, and new jobs requiring human thinking will be newly created.
We need to study more and study new things.
We need to study more and study new things.
>> correct
However, a college education will be possible online too.
However, a college education will be possible online too.
>> correct
So, universities have to think and find a new way to survive in the complicated education market.
So, universities have to think and find a new way to survive in the complicated education market.
>> correct
I think study online is okay, but we can\'t do experiments online.
I think study online is okay, but we can\'t do experiments online.
>> I think studying online is okay, but we can\'t do experiments online.
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