7/22 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[Describe the world 100 years from now. Describe how people live, and new inventions and also the things that will not change.]
I don\'t know I will be at the earth after 100 years.
A few years ago, I believed I can live more than 100 years with enhanced biotechnology.
But, Nowadays the problem of fine dust is very serious in Korea so my mind is changed.
Anyway, I think our lifestyle is basically quite similar now after 100 years.
People want to take a long vacation and work more shortly.
So many simple labors will substitute by robots.
And people want to back to nature.
Now, many rich men enjoy meditation far from high technology such as smartphone or internet.
Even Steve Jobs said his children don\'t know what is the smartphone and iPad.
People want to get high technology, but, at the same time, they want to far from them.
This is a very interesting thing in the human brain.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for this homework. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
You really made a good point here. I remember reading an article about Steve Jobs. He used to use mindfulness meditation to reduce his stress and gain more clarity. This man who is an inventor would use the power of mediation rather than the technology he created! I guess you are right, humans are really difficult to understand! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I don\'t know I will be at the earth after 100 years.
>>I don\'t know if I will still be around a hundred years from now.
A few years ago, I believed I can live more than 100 years with enhanced biotechnology.
A few years ago, I believed I can live more than 100 years with enhanced biotechnology.
>>A few years ago, I believed that I can live more than 100 years with enhanced biotechnology.
But, Nowadays the problem of fine dust is very serious in Korea so my mind is changed.
But, Nowadays the problem of fine dust is very serious in Korea so my mind is changed.
>>But, nowadays the problem of fine dust is very serious in Korea so my perception about the future has changed.
Anyway, I think our lifestyle is basically quite similar now after 100 years.
Anyway, I think our lifestyle is basically quite similar now after 100 years.
>>Correct
People want to take a long vacation and work more shortly.
People want to take a long vacation and work more shortly.
>>Correct
So many simple labors will substitute by robots.
So many simple labors will substitute by robots.
>>Simple tasks/jobs may be replaced by robots.
And people want to back to nature.
And people want to back to nature.
>>And people would like to go back to nature.
Now, many rich men enjoy meditation far from high technology such as smartphone or internet.
Now, many rich men enjoy meditation far from high technology such as smartphone or internet.
>>These days, rich men prefer to enjoy meditation rather than experiencing advanced technologies, smartphones or the internet.
Even Steve Jobs said his children don\'t know what is the smartphone and iPad.
Even Steve Jobs said his children don\'t know what is the smartphone and iPad.
>>Correct
People want to get high technology, but, at the same time, they want to far from them.
People want to get high technology, but, at the same time, they want to far from them.
>>People want to have an advance technology, but at the same time, stay far away from it.
This is a very interesting thing in the human brain.
>>This is a very interesting thing about humans.
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