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Of course, If I can get the chance, I would go to North Korea.
Its possibility is too low in my research field.
I like to experience in other countries or cultures.
North Korea was a country a long time ago with South Korea
So, our historical roots are the same.
But, we have already passed many times as separate countries.
Our language and culture are already changed a lot.
When I was young, the school educates us that we are the ones.
However, most young people consider we are absolutely a separate country.
Even many young people think that we don\'t need to unify.
If the two countries are unified, we will have to help North Korea for a while, so the public tax will increase and the domestic economy will suffer.
On the other hand, if we collaborate in the science and technology fields, we can improve the quality of knowledge and technology more, and it will help to communicate with other countries through the open land.
I\'m looking forward to doing it in the near future.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I guess it would be really great if North Korean scientists collaborate with other scientists to come up with useful projects but not for creating materials that can be used for war. It would probably make the North Koreans open to the world.
-Rachel
Of course, If I can get the chance, I would go to North Korea, but its possibility is too low in my research field.
>> correct (we just add but before its)
I like to experience in other countries or cultures.
I like to experience in other countries or cultures.
>> I like to have experience in other countries and know more about their culture.
North Korea was a country a long time ago with South Korea.
North Korea was a country a long time ago with South Korea.
>> North Korea was a country alongside South Korea a long time ago.
So, our historical roots are the same.
So, our historical roots are the same.
>> correct
But, we have already passed many times as separate countries.
But, we have already passed many times as separate countries.
>> But we have lived separately for many years now.
Our language and culture are already changed a lot.
Our language and culture are already changed a lot.
>> correct
When I was young, the school educates us that we are the ones.
When I was young, the school educates us that we are the ones.
>> When we were young, the school educated us that we were one.
However, most young people consider we are absolutely a separate country.
However, most young people consider we are absolutely a separate country.
>> correct
Even many young people think that we don\'t need to unify.
Even many young people think that we don\'t need to unify.
>> correct
If the two countries are unified, we will have to help North Korea for a while, so the public tax will increase and the domestic economy will suffer.
If the two countries are unified, we will have to help North Korea for a while, so the public tax will increase and the domestic economy will suffer.
>> correct (awesome sentences)
On the other hand, if we collaborate in the science and technology fields, we can improve the quality of knowledge and technology more, and it will help to communicate with other countries through the open land.
On the other hand, if we collaborate in the science and technology fields, we can improve the quality of knowledge and technology more, and it will help to communicate with other countries through the open land.
>> correct
I\'m looking forward to doing it in the near future.
I\'m looking forward to doing it in the near future.
>> correct
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