7/23 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[Tell me something about the most memorable event in your life; aside from your honeymoon.]
I remember one of my birthday parties when I was in an elementary school.
Almost every year my mother made my birthday party at home with my friends.
My mother made so many foods by herself and prepare a traditional Korean rice cake.
Someday, it was popular among children to go to the kid gym for the birthday party.
There are so many indoor rides and it looks like a small indoor amusement park.
In there, a birthday kid wears a dress like a Disney princess and have a lunch instant pork cutlet.
At that time, it was so cool.
But, I think at this moment, it was a relatively easy birthday party for parents.
They can prepare just present and pay the fee to the gym.
I envied friends who have a birthday party there.
Although my mother made so my hand-made food and gave me so much love, I didn\'t know that at that time.
It was a little regret for me.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for this homework. I appreciate it a lot. ^ ^
Wow! Thank you for sharing one of the most memorable event in your life. As kids, we only thought of ourselves and what made us happy, little do we recognize our parents love and sacrifices. But, don\'t be too hard on yourself. You were only a kid! You didn\'t know better. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I remember one of my birthday parties when I was in an elementary school.
>>I remember one of my birthday parties when I was in elementary school.
Almost every year my mother made my birthday party at home with my friends.
Almost every year my mother made my birthday party at home with my friends.
>>Correct
My mother made so many foods by herself and prepare a traditional Korean rice cake.
My mother made so many foods by herself and prepare a traditional Korean rice cake.
>>My mother prepared a lot of food and also made a traditional Korean rice cake all by herself.
Someday, it was popular among children to go to the kid gym for the birthday party.
Someday, it was popular among children to go to the kid gym for the birthday party.
>>Before, it was popular among children to go to the kid\'s gym to have their birthday parties.
There are so many indoor rides and it looks like a small indoor amusement park.
There are so many indoor rides and it looks like a small indoor amusement park.
>>Correct
In there, a birthday kid wears a dress like a Disney princess and have a lunch instant pork cutlet.
In there, a birthday kid wears a dress like a Disney princess and have a lunch instant pork cutlet.
>>In there, the birthday kid wears a dress like a Disney princess and they would usually serve instant pork cutlet.
At that time, it was so cool.
At that time, it was so cool.
>>Correct
But, I think at this moment, it was a relatively easy birthday party for parents.
But, I think at this moment, it was a relatively easy birthday party for parents.
>>Correct
They can prepare just present and pay the fee to the gym.
They can prepare just present and pay the fee to the gym.
>>They only need to buy presents and just pay the fee to the gym.
I envied friends who have a birthday party there.
I envied friends who have a birthday party there.
>>I envied friends who would have their birthday parties there.
Although my mother made so my hand-made food and gave me so much love, I didn\'t know that at that time.
Although my mother made so my hand-made food and gave me so much love, I didn\'t know that at that time.
>>Although my mother made so many hand-made food and gave me so much love, I didn\'t realize it at that time.
It was a little regret for me.
It was a little regret for me.
>>I regret it a little.
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