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2018-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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How do movies or television influence  people\'s behavior? I think movies or televisoin influenced to enrich for our life because Various of life can to see and we can experience indirectly. And New contents give enjoy to our. It is positive influence. But If you too much watching movies or televison, it is addicted and wasted to time so you\'d like better watch it proper.

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How do movies or television influence 
people\'s behavior?
I think movies or televisoin influenced to enrich for our life because Various of life can to see and we can experience indirectly.

>> I think movies or televisoin influence and enrich our life because we can see and experience various life experiences indirectly from them.

And New contents give enjoy to our. It is positive influence.

>> And new contents give us enjoyment. It is a positive influence.

or

>> New contents from movies or television helps us enjoy life. It\'s a positive influence.

But If you too much watching movies or televison, it is addicted and wasted to time so you\'d like better watch it proper.

>> But if you watch movies or television too much, it is addiction and a waste of time. So you better watch it properly. (So you better watch them within limits.) 

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