7/25 homework

2019-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[Talk about your earliest memory. What happened? How well do you remember the events?] I remember one day that I went to an art institute with my mother. Maybe I was under seven years old at that time. I don\'t like drawing and painting. Although I can not remember all, my mother said I came back to home alone before finish the class. So, my mother was surprised because she never taught me how to go back to home by walking. I think maybe I extremely dislike to learn art. After then, my mother didn\'t send me to art class. It was just a funny memory for me. I learned to play the piano after this event. I enjoyed that. My mother said it is very important to know the children\'s taste. And, Jedah, I have something event so I will go to Seoul right now. I can not attend class tomorrow. See you on Monday. Have a nice weekend.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for this homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
Wow! I didn\'t know you have that strong side in you. You didn\'t like art class so as a show of repulse you walked from that institution to your home! ^ ^  Yes, I agree with your Mom. Parents should know what their children would really like to do instead of forcing them. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

I remember one day that I went to an art institute with my mother. 
>>I remember a time when I went to an art institute with my mother.
Maybe I was under seven years old at that time. 
>>Correct
I don\'t like drawing and painting. 
>>Correct
Although I can not remember all, my mother said I came back to home alone before finish the class.
>>Although I can not remember all, my mother said I came back home alone after I finished that art class.
So, my mother was surprised because she never taught me how to go back to home by walking.
>>So, my mother was surprised because she never taught me how to go home by walking.
I think maybe I extremely dislike to learn art. 
>>Correct
After then, my mother didn\'t send me to art class. 
>>My mother has never sent me to the art class ever since then.
It was just a funny memory for me. 
>>Correct
I learned to play the piano after this event. 
>>Correct
I enjoyed that.
>>Correct OR
>>I enjoyed playing piano more than art. 
My mother said it is very important to know the children\'s taste. 
>>Correct

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