7/30 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Make your own Self Introduction
A) I am [이름] [이름]. I am early 40 years old in this year. I graduated 17 years ago and took up a course in Semiconductors. I\'ve got merried and I have two daughters. The elder daughter is going to the middle school and baby daughter is going to the elementary school now. Now, I\'ve been working for large electronics companies for 18 years. I\'m satisfied with my work and so happy with my coworkers. When it comes to my personality, I think it\'s not introvert at all. It means that I am extrovert guy. So, I usually go hiking Mt.Keumo which is located in close to my house whenever I have a time on weekends and I sometimes join to the marathon competition.
That\'s all I can say about it. Thank you and I appreciate it.
강사 첨삭
WRITING TASK: Make your own Self Introduction
A) I am [이름] [이름].
A) I am [이름] [이름].
>> I am [이름] [이름].
I am early 40 years old in this year.
>> I just turned 40 years old this year.
I graduated 17 years ago and took up a course in Semiconductors.
>> CORRECT!!
I\'ve got merried and I have two daughters.
>> I am married with two daughters.
The elder daughter is going to the middle school and baby daughter is going to the elementary school now.
>> My eldest daughter goes to middle school and my youngest daughter goes to Elementary school.
Now, I\'ve been working for large electronics companies for 18 years.
>> I\'ve been working for a large electronics company for 18 years now.
I\'m satisfied with my work and so happy with my coworkers.
>> CORRECT!
When it comes to my personality, I think it\'s not introvert at all.
>> When it comes to my personality, I think it\'s not introverted at all.
It means that I am extrovert guy.
>> It means that I am an extroverted guy.
So, I usually go hiking Mt.Keumo which is located in close to my house whenever I have a time on weekends and I sometimes join to the marathon competition.
>> So, I usually go hiking in Mt. Keumo which is located close to my house whenever I have time on weekends and I sometimes join marathon competitions.
That\'s all I can say about it. Thank you and I appreciate it.
>> CORRECT!
Dearest Tiger,
Thank you for doing your homework.
I can see some improvement from my last corrections. Keep it up!
Please keep on writing. It will help you improve your sentence construction.
Review and practice both the grammatical and spelling corrections I made for you.
Take care!
~ ♥♥ T. Louise ♥♥
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